Talk:Al-Fa'iz bi-Nasr Allah/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:24, 11 February 2023 (UTC)

Will take this on. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:24, 11 February 2023 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No dead links Y
• No missing citations Y
• Passes spot checks Y

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

• Suffering from epileptic seizures, al-Fa'iz died at the age of eleven currently merely suggests he died of a seizure, suggest Suffering from epileptic seizures, al-Fa'iz died of one at the age of eleven

Life

• he was mutilated and killed by being beaten to death by the palace women suggest simplifying to he was mutilated and beaten to death by the palace women
• @Cplakidas: That is all of my suggestions; a fascinating article. Passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 23:47, 11 February 2023 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review and the suggestions, Iazyges, they have been implemented. Constantine ✍ 07:57, 12 February 2023 (UTC)