Talk:Al Pollard/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:41, 24 January 2010 (UTC)

This is a pretty good article overall. Short, but not easy to find information on older players. Anyway, I have a few issues:

• "Pollard decided to transfer to the United States Military Academy in the spring of 1949 where he played under legendary Vince Lombardi, their backfield coach." Anything written as to a reason for the transfer?
  • I found nothing, although the decision was a bit of a surprise. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs/editor review)}~ 00:05, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
• "Following the end of that season, he was one of the 90 cadets, also including coach Red Blaik's son, who resigned from the academy because of a cribbing scandal." The lead says he was expelled. Was the resignation out of protest or was he forced out?
  • Forced to resign. Clarified. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs/editor review)}~ 00:06, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
• "He was picked up by the British Columbia Lions of the Canadian Football League, with whom he played for until 1956. Pollard then played a single season for the Calgary Stampeders in 1957." Isn't there more information on the three BC years beyond that one sentence?
  • I added a sentence. Nobody really cares about the CFL. Pollard quitting the Eagles was bigger news than any exploits in the CFL. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs/editor review)}~ 00:34, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
• "His spouse of 47 years, Patricia; children John, Kurt (1962-2007), and Melissa Mozer; and eight grandchildren survive him." This reads rather choppy. Modify to make it flow better.
  • Edited. ~EDDY ^{(talk/contribs/editor review)}~ 01:02, 25 January 2010 (UTC)

I'll put this on hold, and when done will give it another read through before hopefully passing it. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:41, 24 January 2010 (UTC)

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass this as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:40, 25 January 2010 (UTC)