Talk:Al Thake/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 21:47, 26 September 2021 (UTC)

Will review MWright96 (talk) 21:47, 26 September 2021 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• The term English doesn't necessarily need to be wikilinked
• I think the lead could be expanded a little with more relevant career statistics

Early life

• Maybe wikilink baseball in this section since it is the first time the sport is mentioned in the prose?

Professional career

• "In 1871, the National Association became the first professional baseball league. Thake joined the league in 1872 as a left fielder for the Brooklyn Atlantics." - maybe both of these sentences can be merged together

Death

• "The New York Post reported that he was caught in fishing nets, while The New York Times reported that the current swept him away." - repetition of "reported"
• Perhaps wikilink baseball fields
• "On September 10, Thake's funeral was held at his mother's home. He was buried at Green-Wood Cemetery in Brooklyn." - these two sentences could be merged together

Career statistics and reputation

• "Baseball historian Frank Russo writes," - perhaps add the book Russo mentions Thake in

Putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 08:43, 27 September 2021 (UTC)