Talk:Alapaʻi/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Redtigerxyz (talk · contribs) 13:15, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Thorough copyedit needed: who were also his first-cousins by virtue of his mothers other marriages. -> mother's the intervention Naeʻole who escape with the child -> intervention of Naeʻole, who escaped the subsequent civil war between his cousins Keeaumoku Nui and Kalaninuiamamao that followed: redundant When a niece of his Kekuʻiapoiwa -> his niece, Kekuʻiapoiwa (redundant) Since this is an English encyclopaedia, Hawaii should be Hawaii, not Hawaiʻi (Hawaiian language spelling). Both spellings used. his relations with Maui was friendly -> were
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Lead is 1 line. Expand per WP:LEAD
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Ref 5 does not author, date
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	tag added.
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	[1], [2] Things missed: Date of birth, death Reason of death date of reign Dates about most battles missing Allegedly poisoned Kamehameha's father
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Major expansion, copyedit needed

I made corrections. Can I nominate article again?--Miha (talk) 17:45, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

Well, now I can only wait. I asked User:KAVEBEAR and he said that this article maybe is not as good as article about one queen of Madagascar. But I would like to try nominate it.--Miha (talk) 17:53, 27 June 2012 (UTC)

The article suffers greatly from a few problems tha even I seem to make on occasion and Kavebear has pointed this out...page numbers for the references. I have been attempting to locate the few references where the page number did transpose correctly with the reference tool I use, but there are a few too many here for the size of the article. After two years since this GA review, I would think there would have been some expansion by now. Seems a little short to be considered GA if it doesn't even qualify as a C article yet. Still start class.--Mark Miller (talk) 04:03, 12 September 2014 (UTC)