Talk:Alcohol You

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 14:56, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

• Fine

Lead

• "It was written by Ionuț Armaș and Breyan Isaac, while Viky Red solely handed its production" → infobox says Red was also a writer.

"Songwriter" is an overall term which encompasses "lyricist" and "composer". Red was one of the composers, so her counts as a songwriter.

I get what you meant with this. How about a composer section in the infobox? Otherwise it might get confusing every now and then. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:54, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

• "Observers noted its minimalistic and Billie Eilish-inspired production." → observes such as crtics, right? Should't this be on the follow up setence?

Yes, I mean music critics, however, the sentence is about the composition still, and I wanted to put that before the reception (just as in the article itself)

• "Alcohol You" on native talk show → "Alcohol You" on the native talk show
• and radio station Virgin Radio → and radio station Virgin

Background and composition

• The lyrics of "Alcohol You" were written by Breyan Isaac and Ionuț Armaș. The latter composed the song alongside its sole producer Viky Red → So Ionuț Armaș was also a producer?

Red was the "sole" producer. "Sole" = "only". Only Red produced the song, but he and Armas were the composers.

I know the synonim. I was not getting it from the context, I mentioned a solution above. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:56, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

• finding inner peace; → Full stop
• Critics → Music critics, critics is too vague

Critical reception

• Fine

Music videos and promotion

• Shouldn't "Additionally, the team also created a video for an "alternative" version of the track (Crystal Freckles Session), which was released on 25 February" be mentioned on the background and compostion section? SInce it is a diferente vesion.

The alternative version is just the studio cut but with all background vocals remove. It should sound more 'live', although it technically isn't :) It's notthat different to be worth noting elsewhere.

Ok I get it, I had to ask. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:59, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

National selection

• and was appointed five songs → and five songs were was appointed
• conisting → do you mean consisting?
• noting "dark and mysterious" → noting a "dark and mysterious"

In Rotterdam

• Roxen was nonetheless internally selected for 2021 → Nonetheless, Roxen was internally selected for 2021

Release history

• Fine

References

• Apple Music is a publisher
• Either wikilink all the "European Broadcasting Union" or only one. Same aplies to Youtube and Wiwibloggs.
• Source 22 is broken, please replace it.
• Advise is to archive all this sources.
• I forgot to metion but either wikilink all the Apple Music or only one, since you decided to wikilink everything do the same here.

Overall

• You can now address these concers. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:37, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan: I have responded to all the points that haven't been addressed. Thank you so much for the review, I will get into yours very soon in the next few days. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:39, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: I left a note here on the lead, let me know what you think of such idea. Of course, when you get the time. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:01, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan:  Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:13, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Just pointing ou something here, the review the nominator is refering to is a reassessment of one of my articles that is under scrutiny from the GA as a new reviewer decided to open up several and pass them withouth giving too much information or none at all to work on. You can read it all here. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:41, 3 April 2020 (UTC)