Talk:Alessandro Del Piero/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 18:26, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

While the article is somewhat comprehensive, unfortunately I am failing this article based on my concerns over sourcing. Other, evident points of concern:

• References are messy: instead of posting Bare URLs, consider using the {{cite news}} or {{cite web}} templates, where appropriate.
• There are three dead links, which are no use to readers
• "doping allegations were aimed at Juventus (they were later found innocent)" needs a ref
• "In 1993, he transferred to Juventus, and has been there ever since" it says he is a free agent in the lead, having left the club.
• "grabbed a hat-trick against Parma" reads sports journalese
• "he won the Serie A championship eight times (1995, 1997, 1998, 2002, 2003, 2005, 2006 and 2012)", why is this in the first paragraph.
• The paragraph which begins with "One of Del Piero's greatest strengths as a footballer is his versatility, which allows him to play in a variety of attacking positions." could be accomadated in a 'Style of play' section. I see no use of it in the Juventus section.
• 2009–10 requires an en dash
• Several instances where words are overlinked (Coppa Italia, Roma)
• "Most notably, Del Piero inspired the Bianconeri", who? I thought it was Juventus. Avoid nicknames unless you introduce it properly.
• "Del Piero finished off a brilliant move by Juve" Juventus
• "On 21 October, he scored a wonderful first-time strike from distance as Juve defeated Real Madrid in Turin.[36] On 21 October, he scored in Juve's Champions League match at home against the Spanish club. In the fifth minute, from open play," repetitive and you are making the same point twice.
• Why is his farewall quote italicised?
• "On TV, Del Piero is famous not just for his matches, but also for broadcasting and advertising skills." something not right here.

Considerable work is needed. I would suggest you take this to WP:PR before deciding to renominate. Del Piero is a great player but the article currently does disservice to his career as prose can lead to misconstrued information. – Lemonade51 (talk) 18:51, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

Think I fixed all the problems that you mentioned, I should have read the article more carefully initially to see all the errors that had been made by previous editors. I really cleaned up the page and made new subsections and fixed all the references, I think. Rupert1904 (talk) 18:56, 11 July 2012 (UTC)