Talk:Aletta Jacobs/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Valereee (talk · contribs) 19:10, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	well-written, clear, very accessible considering how many long Dutch organization names are necessarily included
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

prose

In Early life: "While working as an apprentice dressmaker, she therefore continued her studies at home, where her mother taught her French and German." I can see this was a difficult sentence to cast. The 'therefore' refers to the previous sentence rather than the first phrase of this sentence. I'm trying to figure out how this could be recast. --valereee (talk) 19:15, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

 Done rewrote as "To continue her education, Jacobs worked as an apprentice dressmaker and studied at home, where her mother taught her French and German." SusunW (talk) 13:39, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

The final quote -- it was published in 1996, but do we know when she wrote it? --valereee (talk) 20:04, 25 April 2019 (UTC)

 Done added 1928 per the source. SusunW (talk) 13:39, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

From Early life and education: "When within months, news reached Jacobs' father that Thorbecke was mortally ill, Abraham insisted that his daughter be allowed to register without probation." Does the source say why? Like maybe he worried that with Thorbecke dead, whoever succeeded him would renege on the deal? --valereee (talk) 14:36, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

It doesn't. "Het nieuws dat Thorbecke dodelijk ziek was bracht haar vader ertoe aan te dringen op een definitieve beslissing, waartoe Thorbecke nog op zijn ziekbed de koning raadpleegde. Enkele dagen na zijn dood bereikte Jacobs het op 30 mei 1872 gedateerde bericht, naar verluidt in een zwartomrande envelop, dat zij zich officieel mocht inschrijven als student medicijnen aan de Rijksuniversiteit Groningen" (The news that Thorbecke was fatally ill led her father to insist on a final decision, for which Thorbecke from his sickbed consulted the king. A few days after his death, Jacobs received a message dated 30 May 1872, reportedly in a black-rimmed envelope, that she could officially register as a medical student at Groningen University). SusunW (talk) 15:12, 26 April 2019 (UTC)

SusunW, I figured it hadn't or you'd have mentioned it; it probably seemed clear to the original writer. --valereee (talk) 15:23, 26 April 2019 (UTC)