Talk:Alice's Wonderland Bakery/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:47, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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First off, I'd like to note some of the reasons GA1 was flawed: lead sections do not need citations for material elsewhere in the article, and plot summaries do not need citations. Here's a more typical review for the page, and the changes are mostly copy cleanup.

Also want to shout out BrickMaster02 for keeping the page clean. Children's TV attracts a lot of vandalism, so that is always a larger task than for most pages. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:11, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

One general question: have any further episodes been released since July 21? It appears not.

Copy changes

Before the season tables

• lesser-extent should be "a lesser extent"
  •  Done
• resulting either missing "in"
  •  Done
• Is there a citation for the cast list?
  • The show's end credits are used for this in accordance to WP:PRIMARY
  • Is the Mark Williams (disambiguation) page linked for Mark Williams (actor)?
    •  Done

Production

• Correct typo on "Lewis Caroll" [sic]
  •  Done
• three-layers frosted cakes Should just be "three-layer"
  •  Done
• greenlit to series, should be "the" series
  •  Done
• children of that time Perhaps rephrase to "modern-day children". As worded "that time" might refer to 1951 or earlier, and later sentences make it quite clear that is not the case.
  •  Done
• these include: Remove unnecessary colon or change entirely to "including"
  •  Done
• "Disney Legend Kathryn Beaumont" is the award so integral to her that it merits listing here?
  •  Removed

Music

• the series music director is "the series" redundant here? or maybe "music director for the series" to avoid what should be "the series's music director"
  •  Removed

Reception

• "a fun treat, but not one of Disney's standouts." Sentence fragment quote, so period outside of quotes (MOS:LOGICAL)
  •  Done

Spot checks

• 4: The Futon Critic episode list. This is also the origin of some of the production codes. No inaccuracies seen. Y
• 17: April 1, 2022, ratings from SBD. Premiere had 190,000 viewers though an episode airing later in the day had 270,000. Y
• 34: Release of 7 episodes on June 28 per Digital Trends. Y
• 35: Animation World Network article. This contains Beyl's quote; the "heritage project" wording; the use of food to connect cultures; You have to really know what you want the character to do so that they can be rigged properly.; “And then the Princess of Hearts and the Queen of Hearts and the King are inspired by Cuban cuisine and culture. The set design and even the dialogue - we have Spanish phrases and dishes, their costumes, the palace - that was another opportunity to infuse more culture into the series.”; If we want to do an upside-down cake, we can actually make it upside down.. Y The various quotes are mostly what Earwig snags.
• 46: Common Sense Media review. Quote is accurately reproduced, and Moulton's comments are well summarized by the article. Y

Images

The show poster is non-free and has an appropriate NFUR. The 1951 Alice image is apparently permissible as not being published without a copyright notice in its time. Encouragement: Add alt text.

•  Done

• @Sammi Brie: hopefully, all  done. Pamzeis (talk) 12:56, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

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