Talk:Alice Milliat/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by BennyOnTheLoose in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- "Femina Sport, ... Federation Francaise Sportive Feminine" neither notable? No articles at fr.wiki?
- "she helped form" Milliat helped...
- Might be worth linking association football as a large number of our readers don't really understand that phrase.
- "statue of Alice Milliat was" just Milliat.
- "French Olympic Committee's" link?
- Any reason that image isn't in the infobox, crammed instead underneath it?
- Date format in infobox is different to date format in rest of article.
- Says in infobox her occupation was writer but that term is not mentioned anywhere else at all.
- "Here she .." there.
- Perhaps "translator" should be in the infobox as occupation?
- "she returned to France.[1][2][3] Whilst in England" bit muddled chronologically for me.
- "Olympic Games and founding the IOC (International Olympics Committee) in" -> "Olympic Games and founding the International Olympics Committee (IOC) in"
- "only in the sports of golf" do we need "the sports of"?
- "Formation of the FSFI" you don't even abbreviate to FSFI in this section.
- "asked the IAAF to include" what's that?
- "They refused" two-word sentence, can we merge it with the request sentence, e.g. "but they refused"?
- "Florence Carpentier" who is she?
- "Further edition of the Women's Olympiad were held in 1923 and 1924.[1][10] The 1921 Women's Olympiad..." again, the chronology is a little out of whack for me.
- "played the Dick, Kerr's Ladies in" played against.
- "Olympics s" ?
That's it for a first pass. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:34, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for the constructive comments, The Rambling Man. Hopefully I've addressed everything mentioned above. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:33, 31 August 2021 (UTC)