Talk:Alihan Demir/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: BritneyErotica (talk · contribs) 17:01, 31 August 2023 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	"He was recruited by about 40 schools" Avoid "about". "Demir is the son of Mustafa and Nebahat and has one sister named Didem." Maybe include the parent's last name as it seems incomplete. Then again the source doesn't reference their last name.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Spotchecks look good. Links are live. I had trouble accessing Citation 3. If this is also a problem for you consider using an archived version or an alternate source as the link could be dead.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	It would be nice to try and find an image to illustrate the article. Overall well written and will pass very soon.

@BritneyErotica: Hi! Thank you for taking this on. Would "roughly" be better than "about"? I'm not sure how to express that. Remove the sentence entirely perhaps? And yeah, I guess adding the parents' last name is the best solution. I archived Reference 3, as well. Unfortunately, there doesn't seem to be a free image on Commons or Flickr at this time. JTtheOG (talk) 19:12, 31 August 2023 (UTC)

Ideally the exact amount would be provided (e.g., 41 schools). It read a bit speculative if that makes sense as in written without concrete information even if the source says "about". BritneyErotica (talk) 03:35, 1 September 2023 (UTC)

Sorry to jump in here, I hope it's ok to say that I'm noticing that you are quite new to reviewing BritneyErotica and if the source says "about" 40 schools then the article writer can only report that, or say "around" or "roughly". That doesn't make it speculative, since we can only use the available sources. Mujinga (talk) 21:47, 1 September 2023 (UTC)

I'm basically requesting further research to establish if that's the best source or if it can be more specific. BritneyErotica (talk) 03:42, 2 September 2023 (UTC)

I removed the sentence as there doesn't seem to be an exact number available out there. JTtheOG (talk) 05:04, 16 September 2023 (UTC)

I've read through everything again and it's all good. I can access the previously mentioned citation now so there are no issues with that. BritneyErotica (talk) 16:14, 20 September 2023 (UTC)

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