Talk:All in the Family (Body of Proof)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 16:20, 2 August 2012 (UTC)

• Picture: You note that the facial expressions were praised by critics, but nowhere in the article does it expand upon this. Yes it does - Reception.  Done
• Intro: "death at his home by" Maybe change 'home' to 'house', since you just said the word 'home'. Same thing in the plot section  Done
• Plot: "The attack on Ed was personal and after Detective Samantha Baker (Sonja Sohn) finds evidence to suggest Mike did kill his father, such as negative emails about his father." This sentence is fragments. Please reword, maybe to "Detective Samantha Baker (Sonja Sohn) concludes that the attack on Ed was personal after she finds evidence to suggest Mike did indeed kill his father, such as negative emails."  Done
• Plot: "he's" -> "he is" no contractions  Done?
• Plot: "Curtis explains to Todd that Manny is a juvenile; but he won’t be able to be released back to his former home, as he is being abused there." -> "Curtis explains to Todd that Manny is a juvenile, but he will not be able to be released back to his former home, as he is being abused there."  Done
• Plot: You don't need to cite the episode for the plot, as its assumed the episode is a generic reference for the entire page. - See Letting Go Review.  Not done
• Reception: "Among viewers between ages 18 and 49, it received a 2.0 rating/9 share; a share represents the percentage of households using a television at the time the program is airing." -> "Among viewers between ages 18 and 49, it received a 2.0 rating/9 share. This means that it was seen by 2 percent of all 18- to 49-year-olds, and 9 percent of all 18- to 49-year-olds watching television at the time of the broadcast."  Done
• Reception: When you said "Of the… scene", I'd say, "Writing about the X scene, he/she noted…" {[done}}
• References: add writer and director for Ref 1, 4-6  Not done
• References: Use consistent dating methods…  Done

That's it. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 22:32, 2 August 2012 (UTC) - Finished - Thanks! — M.Mario (T/C) 17:08, 3 August 2012 (UTC)

Although, I still don't like the episode citing the episode, I will let it slide and pass.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:32, 4 August 2012 (UTC)