Talk:All the Good Girls Go to Hell/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:43, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will begin this review today, though it may continue after the day --K. Peake 12:43, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Separate the recording years using a semi-colon since it is not confirmed that recording was not continous
• Wikilink all lowercase per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "The song was released for" → "It was released for"
• Remove download and streaming since they are not backed up
• " from When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?" → "from the album."
• ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" is a pop track. It sees" → "A pop track, "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" sees"
• "climate change and takes the viewpoint" → "climate change and take the viewpoint" with the wikilink
• Why is only the devil mentioned when she takes on God's perspective too?
• "the top five in five countries," → "the top five of five countries,"
• ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" has received" → "The song has received"
• "including a platinum award by" → "including being certified platinum in the United States by"
• "and uploaded onto" → "and uploaded to"
• "walk through a deserted road," → "walk down a deserted road,"
• "praising the visuals message" → "praising the visual's message"
• "promoted the song by performing it live at venues" → "promoted "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" by performing it live at festivals"
• You should mention what year(s) she performed at those festivals
• "Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival, Glastonbury Festival and during" → "the Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival, and Glastonbury Festival as well as during"

Background and release

• "with Vulture Eilish's brother, Finneas O'Connell says" → "with Vulture, Eilish's brother Finneas O'Connell, known under his stage name of Finneas, said"
• "God and the Devil, and" → "God, and the Devil, as well as"
• "do all of this?'"." → "do all of this?'""
• "in an interview on" → "in an interview with"
• "the perspective of the devil and god," → "the perspective of the Devil or God,"
• "He continues, saying it is" → "He continued, saying them looking down is"
• "that "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" chorus" → "that the chorus to "All the Good Girls Go to Hell"" with the target
• "Eilish shared in an" → "Eilish shared an"
• Target Instagram story to Instagram Stories per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "March 25, 2020, a playlist" → "March 25, 2020 that featured a playlist"
• "kinda "inspired" → "kind of "inspired"
• "with the latter handeling" → "with the latter handling"
• "mastered by John Greenham" → "The song was mastered by John Greenham"
• Target Robert Kinelski to Cocaine 80s
• "The song was first released on" → ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was released on"
• Remove wikilink on When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?
• "It was later released as the albums sixth single" → "The song was later released as the album's sixth single" with the target
• "A flexi disc and cassette of the song was" → "A flexi disc and cassette for the song were"
• "The release came with" → "The releases came with"
• "to US customers via email." → "to customers in the United States through email."

Composition and lyrics

• Target music critics to Music journalism
• "noted the songs" → "noted the song's"
• Wikilink G-funk
• Wikilink Robert Christgau
• "mentions the song has" → "mentioned the song features"
• Target synths to Synthesizer
• "while Jason Lipshutz of" → "and Jason Lipshutz from"
• "commented about Eilish’s" → "said Eilish's"
• "of the propulsive."" → "of the propulsive"." for consistency
• "Lyrically, Eilish forsakes" → "Lyrically, the song sees Eilish forsake"
• "mocks and walks away heaven," → "mocks and walks away from heaven,"
• Target Catholicism to Catholic Church
• "Eilish explains her degeneracies" → "with Eilish explaining that her degeneracies"
• "climate change. 'Man is such a fool, why are we saving him?'"." → "climate change", noting that she quips: "Man is such a fool, why are we saving him?""

Critical reception

• "has received mainly positive reviews from music critics." → "has been met with mainly positive reviews from music critics."
• "Jon Pareles of" "Jon Pareles from"
• "magazine, labeled the track" → "magazine labeled the track"
• "Christopher Thiessen of" → "Christopher Thiessen from"
• "one of the albums essential tracks" → "one of the essential tracks on When We All Fall Asleep, Where Do We Go?"
• "Roisin O'Connor in his review for The Independent had negative thoughts for the albums first four track," → "Roisin O'Connor, in his review for The Independent, had negative thoughts for the album's first four tracks,"
• "kind of momentum."" → "kind of momentum"."
• "descroibed the songs title as" → "described the song's title as"
• "John Murphy, stated that" → "John Murphy stated that"
• Should 'Xanny' be surrounded by apostrophes like 'All The Good Girls Go To' is?

Kyle Peake, I think it should because it is a song. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 21:45, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

I meant to put "Shouldn't" not "Should" because it is not properly surrounded by them --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

• "like 'All The Good Girls Go To'."" → "like 'All The Good Girls Go To Hell'"."
• "across the beat."" → "across the beat"."
• "Sean Ward, writing for" → "Sean Ward, for"
• "compared the song" → "compared the song to the Spice Girls'" with the wikilink
• Add release year of the song in brackets
• "and interpreted the song" → "and interpreted it"
• "and "flips so" → "and that she "flips so"
• "the track's overall narrative."" → "the track's overall narrative"."
• "describing it has an" → "describing it as an"
• "damn appealing."" → "damn appealing"."
• "Jules LeFevre, writing for" → "Jules LeFevre, for"
• "but comments that the song is" → "while commenting that the song is"
• "and melody" and you’re left" → "and melody", leaving you"
• "it never happens."" → "it never happens"."

Commercial performance

• "and number 15 on the" → "and number 15 on the US"
• "which denotes track-equivalent sales of 1,000,00 units based on sales and streams." → "denoting track-equivalent sales of 1,000,000 units in the US based on sales and streams."
• Move Canada sentence to starting the second para
• "at number 19 and was certified" → "at number 19, and it was certified"
• "by Music Canada MC for shipments of over 80,000 copies in the country." → "by Music Canada (MC) for shipments of over 80,000 copies in Canada."
• "was later was certified silver" → "was later certified silver"
• "for selling over 200,000 units." → "for selling over 200,000 units in the United Kingdom."
• "within the top 5" → "within the top five"
• "peaking at the top of the chart." → "peaking at number one in the country."
• "was ultimately certified gold in New Zealand by the" → "was ultimately certified gold by"
• "15,000 copies in the country." → "15,000 copies in New Zealand."

Music video

Background

• Wikilink music video
• "with an image that said "haven’t" → "of an image that said "haven’t"
• Mention the dates of both teasers

 Not done, they were both teased during the same week.

Can you mention the date of the first one then? --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

• "The music video was directed by" → "It was directed by"
• Target Los Angeles, California to Los Angeles
• "the videos stylist talked about filming the video" → "the video's stylist talked about the filming"
• "She revealed Eilish" → "She revealed that Eilish"
• "agonizingly long takes."" → "agonizingly long takes"."
• "She also added that" → "The stylist further added that"
• Remove wikilink on global warming
• "on the video description" → "in the video's description"
• Target UN Climate Summit to Post–Kyoto Protocol negotiations on greenhouse gas emissions
• "also asking to support" → "also asking them to support"
• "which measured six inches" → "that measured six inches"
• "explained it was in" → "explained the figure was in"
• "a dioramic display."" → "a dioramic display"."

Credits and personnel

• Move to being the last sub-section here
• Promonews should be italicised
• The two sub-sections under this one should be sub-headings instead

 Not done

Why did you not move it and keep the sub-sections? --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

K. Peake, I did move it. The sub-sections are better than sub headings. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 00:56, 25 November 2020 (UTC)

• Production companies should be above personnel

Synopsis

• Img looks good
• "left off.[55] It opens with a shot of Eilish's back being stabbed by syringes" → "left off, opening with a shot of syringes being used to stab Eilish's back" and move [55] to the end of the sentence before [56]
• "she falls down from" → "Eilish falls down from"
• "her white wings and eyes start filling" → "with her white wings and eyes starting to fill"
• "She tries to" → "Eilish tries to"
• "but has a hard time." → "but struggles to do so."
• "Eilish barely manages" → "She barely manages"
• "her entire body and white wings are" → "with her entire body and white wings being"
• "continues walk down" → "continues to walk down"
• "starts to catch on fire." → "begins to catch fire."
• "through the road and" → "down the road and"
• "turns around, her wings" → "turns around; her wings"

Critical reception

• Retitle to Reception since it mentions the awards
• "saying it" → "said it"
• "we've laid eyes."" → "we've laid eyes"."
• Remove wikilink on MTV
• "viewed thed video as" → "viewed the video as"
• ""dark" and" → ""dark", and"
• "was "more than just a music video."" → "is "more than just a music video"."
• "stated that the video was" → "wrote that the visual is"
• "while praising it" → "while praising the music video"
• "to act right."" → "to act right"."
• "Katrina Nattress of iHeart Radio described" → "Katrina Nattress of iHeartRadio described"
• "The music video for "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was" → "The music video was"
• Wikilink 2020 MTV Video Music Awards
• "for Best Cinematography, Best Visual Affects, and Video For Good." → "for the awards of Best Cinematography, Best Visual Affects, and Video For Good." with the targets

Live performances and other use

• Retitle to Live performances and usage in media
• ""All the Good Girls Go to Hell" was included on" → "The song was included on"
• "Eilish and Finneas further performed" → "Eilish and Finneas performed"
• "on November 24, 2019, making it her first ever" → "on November 24, making her first"
• "switched to bass guitar, as" → "switched to playing bass guitar as" with the wikilink
• "around the stage against" → "around the stage, against"
• "ends, the teenager stares into the camera and sticks" → "ended, Eilish stared into the camera and stuck"
• Target acoustic to Acoustic music
• Wikilink Steve Jobs Theater per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Target Apple Music Awards to Apple
• "In April of the same year," → "In April of that year,"
• "in the trailer of" → "in the trailer for"

Credits and personnel

• Add a fullstop at the end of the credits adapted part

Kyle Peake, what do you mean by this? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 22:14, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Add a fullstop after the album's title, even though there is a question mark; this is not a grammatical mistake since that's the title of the album --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

• Target Rob Kinelski to Cocaine 80s

Charts

Weekly charts

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Year-end charts

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION
• Remove Israel since that is a ranking from favourites, not chart performance

Certifications

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Release history

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION
• Format → Format(s)
• Label → Label(s)
• Target Interscope to Interscope Records
• Target Cassette to Cassette tape

References

• Copyvio score looks too high at 45.4%

Kyle Peake, its because of the use of "All the Good Girls Go to Hell" and When We All Fall Asleep

• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 8 and wikilink The Music Network
• Wikilink NME on ref 12
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with refs 41 and 43
• WP:OVERLINK of Stereogum on ref 49
• Cite Promonews as work/website instead for ref 54
• WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 59
• WP:OVERLINK of MTV on ref 61
• WP:OVERLINK of iHeartRadio on ref 66
• WP:OVERLINK of Variety on refs 69 and 74
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 75
• Cite Tophit as the publisher for ref 93 with the wikilink

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold after reviewing over the course of today, faster than I expected but I'll give you time to fix the issues still! --K. Peake 16:56, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

• The Ultimate Boss I have responded where anything still needs fixing. --K. Peake 08:39, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

• The Ultimate Boss I did move the credits and personnel sub-section since you forgot about that, but everything else looks fine. ✓ Pass now, glad to do so as I love this song! --K. Peake 16:34, 25 November 2020 (UTC)