Talk:Allessandro Liberati

To any editors on 10/8/12

I uploaded this article last night. Please don't fret on the missing wikilinks because I'll be adding lots of those when I get the chance today, so please don't feel you have to just because there are none.

---Saw1998 (talk) 12:50, 8 October 2012 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Allessandro Liberati/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Tomcat7 (talk · contribs) 12:56, 20 December 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   When was File:Liberati Portrait.png shot? Likewise File:Liberati in millitary.jpeg.

   The portrait was shot for a local newspaper (His American hometown Detriot) in 1923, and the military uniform was found appearing on the Library of Congress

   The first in Warsaw Union the second loc.gov ---Saw1998 (talk) 14:05, 20 December 2012 (UTC)

   That should be noted in the picture summaries

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

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I made some copyedits.

• The major issue with this article are the POV wordings that are teeming in the Style section. An example is "In 1895, he became known for establishing now a well-known tradition of circus bands when be began traveling with the superstars of the circus world, the Ringling Brothers, for whom he opened performances of their popular circus gaiety.[12]" - the underlined is not defined exactly (and is confusing), and the italicized wordings are too expressive for an encyclopedia.
• What is his nationality? The first sentence should include his date of birth and date of death, per WP:OPENPARA
• That he was a virtuoso should not be merely noted in the lead
• Only the infobox informs us when he was born or died. So, there should be more information regarding that, such as the cause of his death.
• You use the +ing form too often. For example, instead of "he was also known for being a respectable bandleader for" you could just write "he was a respectable bandleader". The prose will become more engaging.
• "He married his wife, Elsie, in 1881. They lived in New York and had one daughter." is unreferenced. What was his daughter's name? Perhaps add more information to his family life.--Tomcat (7) 20:34, 25 December 2012 (UTC)

  Most of the concerns remain unaddressed, so failing this. Wizardman 23:58, 13 January 2013 (UTC)