Talk:Alvin Clark (schooner)

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:01, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• Move those refs out of the lead and put them in the main part of the article where you've expanded upon everything you've said in the lead.
• Infobox has "{{{DESIGNATED_OTHER1_ABBR}}}" which clearly needs addressing.
• Infobox mentions "Square stern" but this isn't mentioned anywhere in the article.
• "foot of Sixth Avenue. " is mentioned in the lead and infobox but not the article.
• Ref 1 doesn't appear to provide any sourcing information, it's just a link to a search engine.
• " in Menominee, Michigan at t" comma after Michigan.
• "rigged as a brigantine with a square rigged" any chance of avoiding that repetition?
• " in Trenton, Michigan[7] in" comma after Michigan.
• "1847,[5][3]" ref order.
• "the ship for shipping" repetitive.
• "it was it sold in 1852.[8] The second owner of the ship was" before he sold it in 1852 to ... i.e. merge sentences and make it active (he sold) rather than passive (it was sold).
• I'm not an expert and I note Great Lakes is mentioned in the lead but nowhere else, no lakes are name-checked and this assumes our readers are familiar with the geography. And I'm not...
• " to Oconto, Wisconsin to " comma after Wisconsin.
• Consider linking technical terms like "hold", "hatch", "mate", "salvage rights", "slip" etc.
• "Alvin Clark[11]," ref after comma.
• " recovering artifacts[5] " move ref to end of sentence.
• "drunk" perhaps "inebriated" for encyclopedic tone.
• AVOID SHOUTING in ref titles.
• "deemed beyond saving, and it was deemed" deemed x 2.
• "p. 220-21" should be "pp. 220–21".
• "Anchor - Wisconsin " should be en-dash, not hyphen.

That's all I have for now, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 11:28, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

All issues are fixed. Lettler (talk) 15:33, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Promoted. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 15:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 22:54, 5 June 2020 (UTC)

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The Alvin Clark in 1978

• ... that the schooner Alvin Clark (pictured), which sank in Green Bay in 1864, was successfully raised in 1969? Source: Wisconsin Shipwrecks
  • ALT1:... that the schooner Alvin Clark (pictured) was called "the finest preserved historic vessel in the United States?" Source: Schooner Passage: Sailing Ships and the Lake Michigan Frontier p. 219

Created by Andrew Jameson. Expanded to GA status by Lettler (talk). Nominated by Lettler at 16:14, 24 April 2020 (UTC).

• Article length and age (just passed GA today) are fine, no copyvio or plagiarism concerns, reliable sources are used. I have a slight preference for ALT1. --TheSandDoctor ^Talk 23:31, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
• Comment I agree, ALT1 works better. Lettler (talk) 00:50, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

• Hi, I came by to promote this. I don't understand why ALT1 works for you; it is completely out of context. Would you consider combining the two hooks in some way, like:
• ALT2: ... that after lying on the seafloor for nearly 100 years, the schooner Alvin Clark (pictured) was noted as "the finest preserved historic vessel in the United States"? Yoninah (talk) 01:36, 2 June 2020 (UTC)

• @Yoninah: I found ALT1 more interesting than alt0. However, do agree that alt2 is better. --TheSandDoctor ^Talk 03:08, 2 June 2020 (UTC)
• @Yoninah: I agree as well. Thank you for the suggestion; it's my first DYK nomination. Lettler^hello 03:23, 2 June 2020 (UTC)

• @TheSandDoctor: could you give a tick to ALT2 please? Yoninah (talk) 16:33, 3 June 2020 (UTC)

• @Yoninah: ALT2 --TheSandDoctor ^Talk 05:26, 4 June 2020 (UTC)