Talk:Alyssa Healy/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Courcelles in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk) 08:33, 13 March 2010 (UTC)Reply

Hello; and welcome to the first GA review on a female cricketer- if it's not the first, it's the first I've ever done. I'm not a big fan of the checklist, and I like to read an article in two different sessions before posting a ton of comments, so all I'll post tonight will be anything that just jumps out at me... which may be nothing at all, since I've not read the article yet. Courcelles (talk) 08:35, 13 March 2010 (UTC)Reply

  • Is her family relationship really important enough to mention in the lead?
  • "and took one catch." Is there any wikilink available to explain what a "catch" is in cricket?
  • Same issue for "scoring only 24 runs in her first five innings."
  • "school CAS cricket competition"? What does that acronym mean?
  • "In reply, Healy made a duck..." Even as an someone who has watched cricket, this makes no sense to me. This are really my biggest concern- the article is written for those who already are well familiar with cricket

I've read this article twice, and let me say this is a very nice article. With about fifteen minutes of work, I'll be proud to pass this one. Courcelles (talk) 09:58, 14 March 2010 (UTC)Reply

I've done all these except the lead. It's pretty rare for parent/child to both play for the country. Playing professionally is not a big deal, but for the country, only around 15 are in teh squad at any one time. YellowMonkey (vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll) 05:30, 15 March 2010 (UTC)Reply
Got it. One more issue; I've recently learned GA's are supposed to have the Template:Persondata in them. Courcelles (talk) 10:17, 15 March 2010 (UTC)Reply
After another read through, this one   passes. Very nice article, and for the record, I agree with the choice of pictures. Courcelles (talk) 20:39, 16 March 2010 (UTC)Reply