Talk:Amegilla dawsoni
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editThis article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Narayanan anagha. Peer reviewers: Orchidabar, Jkottapalli.
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Peer Review
editI think that this article gives some clear and in-depth descriptions in certain sections like Sexual Signaling and Nesting Cycle. I fixed some spelling errors and the organization of the sections. I placed Panmixia under the broader heading of Mating and created a broader heading title for the Parasites section labeled Interactions with Other Species. I think that ways to develop this article further are to add more detail and research to the sections of Distribution and Habitat and Diet and Feeding, as well as creating new sections of Human Importance and Foraging Behaviors to give a broader scope of behaviors to this bee. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rasikareddy1019 (talk • contribs) 17:18, 22 October 2015 (UTC)
When I first looked at this page, I noticed there was no distribution map or conservation status on the right hand side. These are two extremely helpful pieces of information for someone who is looking to Wikipedia to learn about this species. I strongly recommend using PhotoShop or another program to draw a distribution map that illustrates this species is found in Western Australia. If the conservation status is unknown, I would just make that explicit in the article. To improve the article, I added hyperlinks to the taxonomy and phylogeny section as well as the identification and mating sections. I enjoyed the overall organization of this article, nice work with only a few changes needed! I like how this article is clear to a layperson. I liked how the author did a good job of defining jargon throughout the article. I also enjoyed the discussion on sexual signaling.Orchidabar (talk) 19:22, 22 October 2015 (UTC)
Suggestions
editOverall, the article was extremely informative and well written. Especially good job with the sections on mating patterns and sexual selection. I do, however, think you can do a better job with your citations, especially in the description and identification section— in particular the fact that starts with "the bee can get up to 23 mm in body length and 45 mm in wingspan...” needs a citation/reference to be added. In general, your citations are somewhat lacking, and could use some additions (I understand that you are citing the ends of paragraphs, but at times it might be helpful to include citations after major facts are summarized). I also think that you need to add a bit more to the “overview” section. I think it would be useful to add some information about social/non-social, mating, sexual dimorphism and maybe brood provisioning to the overview section (interesting, species-specific tid-bits usually make the overview interesting and really add to the article). I also think that it would help if you made “nesting cycle” its own section (most bee articles on Wikipedia seem to have a discrete “colony cycle” section; it would maybe be good to maintain this structure). I went ahead and fixed some of your grammar and broken hyperlinks in your “Diet and Feeding” section. I also added some hyperlinks to a couple of words throughout the article. Overall, the article provides good details and is well written-- great work! Jkottapalli (talk) 21:41, 22 October 2015 (UTC)
More thoughts
editGood job on this article! It is extremely thorough and well researched! I really appreciate all the hard work that must have gone into it. To start, I changed the capitalization of some of the headings to comply with Wikipedia standards. Additionally, I added some citations where appropriate and where there was not one before. I would like to see more images integrated throughout the article, especially a range map present in the taxobox. Because the article is very thorough, seeing a lot of words with few images is a little overwhelming. I think that the summary of the species at the top of the article might contain too much information. I would recommend taking out the information in that section that is repeated in other sections of the article. If you were to add more information to this article, I think that a discussion of the specie’s defense behaviors would lend well to the article overall.Mebennett49 (talk) 00:10, 22 November 2015 (UTC)Mebennett49
Peer Review
editI thought there was a lot of detail in all of the current sections and all the sections were well written and relevant. In order to improve, I think adding pictures would contribute much to the article. For example, the section on sexual dimorphism would greatly benefit from pictures of both male and female bees. Also, additional sections should be added to the article. Under "Interactions With Other Species" there is only one section, "Parasites". I would recommend adding sections on predators, competitors, and other bee species. Kjkozak (talk) 20:22, 4 December 2015 (UTC)