Talk:Andrianampoinimerina/GA1

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

---

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 19:23, 26 June 2015 (UTC)

Hello, I'm Calvin999 and I am reviewing this article.

Review

• Could you not include a pronunciation guide of how to say Andrianampoinimerina after his name is mentioned at the start, like Beyoncé does after her name?

• Added

• How come children and spouse aren't included in the info box?

• The exact number of wives is uncertain (it was definitely more than the commonly reported 12), and there are an uncounted number of legitimate and illegitimate children.

• one of four continually warring principalities that emerged upon the division of the historically unified Imerina kingdom by King Andriamasinavalona a century before. → Quite long, I was nearly out of breath.

• Reworded

• designated a UNESCO → Shouldn't it be 'an' as two vowels shouldn't meet?

• The U is pronounced like "you", so "a" is used

• all Imerina, then → all Imerina and then

• Done

• He died after reigning for 23 years, during which time he successfully reunited → Having reigned for 23 years at the time of his death, he had successfully reunited

• Done

• Andrianampoinimerina had begun, and over the next two decades largely achieved Andrianampoinimerina's vision. → Repetition of Andrianampoinimerina

• changed to "his father's vision"

• The location of his birth in the Birth sub-section is different to that listed in the info box

• Fixed

• Ramboasalamarazaka was born during a period → Who is this?

• Clarified

• Ambohimanga remains among the most important spiritual and cultural sites in Madagascar, and was recognized as Madagascar's only cultural UNESCO World Heritage Site in 2001.[23] → Chronologically, I don't think this is best suited here. I think it would be better placed in Legacy.

• Moved to legacy section

• Regarded as a "self-made man" who did not rely on his privileges as a prince, his independence, temperament, tenacity and sense of justice made him popular among the commoners and the slaves of Ambohimanga. → As you've used a quote, a citation should be provided really.

• Removed the quotes - this was not literally quoted from a source (I used the quotes inappropriately to indicate a colloquialism)

• The later half of Andrianampoinimerina's reign → The latter half of Andrianampoinimerina's reign

• Changed

• I'd make Death and succession section just one paragraph. I don't see the point of having two of them being single sentences.

• Done

• Same for the last sentence of Legacy, just tack it on to the end of the last paragraph.

• Done

• I've responded to all of your points above. Please let me know if you'd like to see any further changes. Many thanks for taking the time to review this. - Lemurbaby (talk) 03:40, 8 July 2015 (UTC)

Summary

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Outcome

Well written article. On hold for 7 days.  — Calvin999 16:51, 6 July 2015 (UTC)

Pass or Fail:  — Calvin999 08:04, 8 July 2015 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.