Talk:Another Body Murdered/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Grapple X in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:00, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Could link Music of Samoa for "Samoan musical culture" in the lead.
- One para in the lead is probably sufficient for an article of this modest size.
- "Charting" can be linked to Record chart.
- "manager Happy Walters. Walters was" repetitive.
- "written by Billy Gould, Boo-Yaa T.R.I.B.E., ... Mike Patton and Roddy Bottum, except" all overlinked.
- "Samoan a capella" lead said musical culture, not specifically a capella.
- "time, Jim Martin, did not wish to participate, Gould" --> "time, Jim Martin did not wish to participate so Gould..."
- Our article seems to italicise The A.V. Club. As you have in ref 7 in fact.
- ISBNs should be consistently formatted.
That's all. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:24, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for having a look at this; I've made the recommended fixes; as for the a capella singing, that's what the source specified so I've just called it out specifically in the lead rather than glossing it as before. Standardised the ISBNs as 13-digits but can go the other way if there's a preference. Gʀᴀᴘᴘʟᴇ ˣ 11:33, 3 September 2021 (UTC)