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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 18:17, 27 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

"Another Suitcase in Another Hall" is a song recorded by Scottish singer Barbara Dickson, for the 1976 concept album, Evita, which contains songs from the musical of the same name based on the life of Argentinian icon Eva Perón. → Quite a long sentence.
Eva throws out her husband's mistress on the streets who sings the track, → So, who sings the song? (Third paragraphs make it clear it's the mistress, but I didn't get that prior to that paragraph)
not prefer her → not like her (this implies an alliterate version existed)
It managed to → Implies it struggled?
Considering Madonna's version has a dedicated section, I think you should reduce the Madonna info in this para and instead mention some of the many other artists you say have covered it.
Juan Perón's affinity for young women, → Juan Perón, and his affinity for young women,
during recording, → during the recording sessions (two ing's doesn't sound right, to me anyway)

Moving on to Madonna's part...

I think "Don't Cry for Me Argentina" should be linked the first time in the prose here and the info box, but to Madonna's version, since the link in Dickson's version is to the original version.
for the part → to play the part
had barely any promotion → I don't think this reads very encyclopaedic and slightly fan-written
and no official music video was shot. → If it didn't happen, I don't think there's a need to mentioned that something didn't happen.
on September 1995, → in September 1995,
completely comfortable → Remove 'completely'. If you're not conformable with something, then you're clearly not completely comfortable.
talks or releasing → typo
March 29, 1997 → Comma after 1997
Elsewhere it → Comma after Elsewhere
in the Netherlands it peaked at number 91 while in Sweden it came at number 60. → I'd switch these around so it was 60 then 91, in order.
No track list section with the B-side?
Ref 8: Should be Official Charts Company, not UK Singles Chart.
Ref 28: Has a double " " next to Miami. Use ' in title's instead.