Talk:Anthony F. Ciampi/GA1

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Nominator: Ergo Sum (talk · contribs) 16:08, 30 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 21:22, 14 October 2024 (UTC)

Prose clock

Lead

He was responsible for rebuilding the College of the Holy Cross, of which he was president three times, after it was destroyed by fire and rescuing it from financial ruin and pressure to close by the Jesuits superiors: This sentence is hard to follow because of the distance between his two responsibilities and the double "and" at the end. Also, "Jesuits" -> "Jesuit"

Ciampi returned [to] the Holy Cross

where he expanded the campus and Fenwick Hall: This implies the Fenwick Hall is separate from the campus. Is this the case?

In his later years, he was the rector of the Jesuit novitiate in Frederick, Maryland, from 1883 to 1887: Timescale is given twice.

Early life

in Rome in the Papal States: Perhaps this is common phrasing that I haven't seen before, but isn't "in the Papal States, Rome" better since it avoids repetition of "in"?

He came to be considered an accomplished Latinist: By whom?

In 1840, Ciampi accepted this invitation and sailed for the United States: The previous paragraph says he was teaching grammar in Italy from 1840-1844

to the United States. In 1840, Ciampi accepted this invitation and sailed for the United States: Repetition of "United States" is unneeded.

Link "Georgetown University chapel"

as a minister or missionary: Could be interpreted as historians being unsure which it was. Perhaps change to "engaged in ministry and missionary work" or "ministry and outreach".

First presidency

Jan Roothan-> "Jan Roothaan"

Is Joseph Aschwanden notable enough for a link?

a devastating fire: Pushing a narrative, better to let the facts speak for themselves.

Is there any other reliable sources describing the fire? One citation for an important and large paragraph isn't ideal.

the entire building was destroyed, except for the east wing and library, whose contents were rescued from the fire: Makes it seem like only the items in the east wing and library were saved, and the rooms ended up burning.

Ciampi wrote [to] Roothaan directly

but faced hesitation from Stonestreet: Unclear why this is important and what he hesitated about

Second presidency

some at Holy Cross: Is it possible to provide who?

Link "pedagogy"

Beckx [to] wrote Ciampi that

new provincial superior, Burchard Villiger, wanted Beckx to remove Ciampi: Why?

Ciampi reformed the curriculum into a liberal arts curriculum: Repetition of curriculum, and link "liberal arts".

bringing it into closer alignment with the Ratio Studiorum: The lead says "he brought the curriculum into conformity with the Ratio Studiorum". "Conformity" and "closer alignment" aren't synonyms.

Third presidency

and some complained: Possible to say who?

the superiors had redecided they would replace him: When did they decide to replace him in the first place?

Loyola College in Maryland

Link "Italian accent"

Pastoral ministry

Link "Archbishop Gaetano Bedini", "episcopate", "John Bapst"

He then traveled throughout the eastern United States

Redlink "Alphonse Charlier", "Louis Hippolyte Gache" , "John J. Murphy", "Archibald J. Tisdall", "Michael O'Kane"?

Link "St. Stanislaus novitiate"

Link "St. Aloysius Church"

Death and legacy

Looks good :)

Sources clock

Will continue when I have time :)

Reliability clock

Print encyclopedias, historical records, newspapers and published historical books, most are reliable.

[3] is a blog, is Pat McNamara an established expert?

I can't check the publisher of "Ryan, John J. (1903). Historical Sketch of Loyola College, Baltimore, 1852–1902" since IA is down, who published it?

[8]: Appears to be self-published? Though it feels like Lucas Fielding was not the sole author.

Spot check clock

[2a, b, c, d, e, f, g, h, i, j]Y

[2j]: Page 117 too

[7, 40, 54]: URL just brings you to the mainpage of a database.

[10a]: Just page 18

[10b]: haul water a quarter of a mile up the hill from the river: source says "nearly a quarter of a mile", also the paragraph seems to be supported by just page 18

[27]Y

[51]: Seems to be supported entirely by page 99

[57]: Should be sfn formatted like the other "College of the Holy Cross" references

Media Y

Media looks good

Copyvio Y

15.3% on earwig, no too close paraphrasing