Talk:Antlion/GA1
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Cwmhiraeth in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:13, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
Hi! Will review this. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 06:13, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:23, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
Lead
edit- whose scientific name means "our European lion" Is it necessary to mention this in the lead?
- Removed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:34, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- The "ferocious" nature of the larvae should be stated a bit more explicitly earlier in the lead. Is it do with predation by the larvae?
- It now says "fiercely predatory". Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:34, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
Description
editDone Sainsf <^>Feel at home 13:41, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Abdomen and thorax are each linked twice.
- Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:28, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- apical veins enclose regular oblong spaces I think apical, oblong and veins need explanations or links.
- Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- with the very long hypostigmatic cell (behind the fusion point of Sc and R1) Difficult to understand. Can this be simpler?
- Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Adult antlions are rarely seen by day, typically being active at dusk and after dark I think you should first state when they are active, followed by when they are not. Like "they are typically nocturnal, and rarely seen by the day".
- unique structure known as a "pilula axillaris" Can we add something more on this?
- Explained. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Link or explain "ventral", "process", "enzyme", "metabolic".
- Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Oviposition" is explained under life-cycle but as it is first mentioned here the description should be shifted to this section. Same for "cocoon" and "pupal" (linked later as "pupate")
- Done, if I have understood you correctly. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:28, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- First mention of "larva" in the main text should be linked.
Distribution
editDone Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:47, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- There are about 2000 species "2,000" as in the lead
- Dune and scrub may be linked
Life-cycle
editDone Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:46, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- members of the Myrmeleontidae family We have not yet discussed the taxonomy in the main text. Should we say "...family, to which the antlions belong"?
- "Abdomen is a duplink
- Removed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- The section is named "Life-cycle" but in places you say "lifecycle".
- Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Link or explain posterior.
- Said rear. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Don't link larva here, link it at first mention, under Description.
Ecology
editDone Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:47, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- detritus in a hole What is that?
- Linked to Wiktionary. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- venom and enzymes , waves detected by receptors Links?
- Linked.
- hind two thoracic segments You mean "two hind thoracic segments"?
- Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- the antlion larva starts to crawl backwards, using its abdomen as a plough to shovel up the soil. Place a citation at the end of this.
- That account is cited to Coelho already. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- "ants" is linked twice.
- Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- "arthropods" is linked twice in this section, both links are duplicate
- Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- the tiny larva specializes in very small insects I think we were using British English?
- Done. But we Brits often use -ize actually. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Australian horsefly Scaptia muscula Write " Australian horsefly (Scaptia muscula)" Same for chalcid wasp.
Rest
editDone Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:47, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- The rest of the article looks good. Two suggestions:
- Should Etymology not be the first section as is usual in articles?
- Moved. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:25, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- What is a gallery doing under Etymology?
- It isn't any more! Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:25, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
That should be all. Great job, both! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 08:18, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
Thanks, both of you have been so quick! I am pleased to promote this splendid article. Good luck! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 15:42, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for the efficient review, Sainsf. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:52, 28 March 2016 (UTC)