Talk:Assaf dynasty/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 01:57, 25 June 2016 (UTC)

• No copyright or infringement detected, so good job there!
• Just a notice, when I italicize "suggestion", I am merely suggesting; if you choose to do so, the better, but if you do not, I will not be offended! Just a heads up since some previous nominators often ask me similar questions! :)

Infobox

• All checks out! Great!

Lead

Paragraph 1

• Re-worded suggestion: "They came to the area in 1306 after being assigned by the Bahri Mamluks to guard the coastal region between Beirut and Jbeil and to check the power of the mostly Shia Muslim population at the time." --> "They came to the aforementioned area in 1306 after being assigned by the Bahri Mamluks to guard the coastal region between Beirut and Jbeil and to check the power of the mostly Shia Muslim population at the time."

Paragraph 3

• Punctuational suggestion: "He was restored to Keserwan in 1585 and was given tax collection authority over the rural districts of Tripoli Eyalet. This brought him into conflict with the Sayfa clan, the Assafs' erstwhile Turkmen clients, one of whose members, Yusuf Pasha Sayfa, was governor of Tripoli." --> "He was restored to Keserwan in 1585 and was given tax collection authority over the rural districts of Tripoli Eyalet; this brought him into conflict with the Sayfa clan, the Assafs' erstwhile Turkmen clients, one of whose members, Yusuf Pasha Sayfa, was governor of Tripoli."
• "The Assaf realm dissipated in 1591 when Muhammad was killed attempting to collect taxes from the Sayfas in Akkar." --> "The Assaf realm dissipated in 1591 when Muhammad was killed while attempting to collect taxes from the Sayfas in Akkar."

History

Mamluk era

• "In 1382 the Mamluk emir Barquq usurped the throne in Cairo, establishing the Burji regime.[6]" --> "In 1382, the Mamluk emir Barquq usurped the throne in Cairo, establishing the Burji regime.[6]"
• Re-worded suggestion: "The latter were ethnic Circassians unlike their Turkmen Bahri predecessors, and frayed relations developed between the Turkmens of Keserwan and the new rulers.[4]" --> "The latter were ethnic Circassians unlike their Turkmen Bahri predecessors, which resulted in frayed relations between the Turkmens of Keserwan and the new rulers.[4]"

Reigns of Assaf and Hasan

• "Keswerwan" --> "Keserwan"

Reign of Qa'itbay

• Punctuational suggestion (and since they share a common citation): "In the ensuing power struggle, Qa'itbay was forced to flee and received refuge in Choueifat, before relocating to Beirut.[12] There, he accrued funds to bribe the governor of Damascus, Janbirdi al-Ghazali, to replace Hasan as the tax farmer of Keserwan.[12]" --> "In the ensuing power struggle, Qa'itbay was forced to flee and received refuge in Choueifat, before relocating to Beirut; there, he accrued funds to bribe the governor of Damascus, Janbirdi al-Ghazali, to replace Hasan as the tax farmer of Keserwan.[12]"
• Rest is fantastic; great work!

Reign of Mansur

• "The Emir Assaf Mosque in Beirut's central district is attributed to Mansour Assaf" --> Full thought; please add a period at the end of the sentence
• "Mansur encouraged Maronite settlement in Keserwan, who he viewed as less of a threat to his rule than his Sunni rivals and as a counterweight to the Shia Muslim clans of Keserwan." --> No source here

Reign of Muhammad

• Re-worded suggestion: "Complaints lodged to the authorities against Mansur ultimately led to his dismissal in 1579. He was replaced with his son Muhammad.[21]" --> "Complaints lodged to the authorities against Mansur ultimately led to his dismissal in 1579, where he was subsequently replaced by his son Muhammad.[21]"

List of Assaf emirs during Ottoman rule

• The whole chart doesn't have any sources; shouldn't there be at least one valid source here to cover all of the information?

End of GA Review:

Absolutely fantastic job!! Your sourcing exceeded my expectations and this is a great article! On hold for seven days so you can address any of my concerns and suggestions! Thanks so much and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 06:20, 25 June 2016 (UTC).

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Thank you so much for your review, I have addressed all the issues except for one suggestion. ~ Elias Z. (talkallam) 10:24, 25 June 2016 (UTC)

Thanks to you as well! I have just passed the article; great work! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 00:41, 26 June 2016 (UTC)!