Talk:Austen Deans/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 16:18, 1 December 2020 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:18, 1 December 2020 (UTC)

• No DABs
• Images properly licensed. No copyright-free image of the fellow available?

• Not that I can find. I'm not that great on images so tend to use official war photographs/paintings since their copyright status is easy to determine. Zawed (talk) 07:56, 11 December 2020 (UTC)

• made prisoner of war (POW) passive voice. Suggest "captured" or somesuch

• Rephrased. Zawed (talk) 07:56, 11 December 2020 (UTC)

• One quibble. POW status is naturally a result of being captured, so your change reads oddly to me. I think that you linked POW in the lede, so you needn't be concerned about using it again in the main body.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:56, 11 December 2020 (UTC)

• I have rephrased to simply refer to being captured. The remain reason for the original usage was to recited the term in full and introduce the abbreviation there, which I have now done in the next section and abbreviated it there (it is abbreviated in the lede but my preference is to keep the lede and body distinct from each other). Zawed (talk) 20:08, 11 December 2020 (UTC)

• Peel Forest, to the southwest of Christchurch, was an area that Austen saw as being similar to the West Coast but with a better climate. Rephrase to eliminate Peel Forest being used in close proximity.

• Done. Zawed (talk) 07:56, 11 December 2020 (UTC)

• Set off his wives' names with commas in the later life section. No further info on Margaret, especially marriage date?

• Done, add year for second marriage. Zawed (talk) 07:56, 11 December 2020 (UTC)

• Short and sweet.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:26, 9 December 2020 (UTC)

• Sturm, thanks for the review. I have responded as above. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 07:56, 11 December 2020 (UTC)