Talk:Austin Church/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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  • "He was a co-founder of the company that first made the product in America." - I think some clarification on what "made the product" means will help things here
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "He was a businessman and involved" - think the word in bold is unneeded
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • The extra space between the paragraph and the early life section is not needed
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Infobox

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  • Church's death place is missing from the infobox
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Early life

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  • Better to use the née template on the term's sole mention
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "However, Church did finish high school" - how about was able to finish
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "In 1826 he moved and practiced in Cooperstown, New York, and in 1829 he moved to" - repetition of the word "moved"
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Career

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  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "but a recent investor in the company objected." - what were the reasons (if any) given to this objection?
  Done - Williams quote. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Wikilink Vulcan to the appropriate article
  • "to sell the Arm & Hammer Baking Soda product for hundreds of uses" - what sort of uses?

Philantrophy

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  • generous contributor to various charities across the country." - Any notable charities? Any type of charities?
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:31, 24 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

References

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  • newspapers.com is spelt as Newspapers.com
  • Reference 6's page number should be D13 instead of 100
  • Reference 7 should include United Press International as the agency
  • Reference 9 is missing the author and the page number is C9 not 29
  • Reference 13 is missing the author
  • Reference 16 is missing the author

Sources

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  • "Rice, Randall Peter. Beyond The Bottom Line... Randall Peter Rice. The Arm & Hammer trademark came from another Church family business, Vulcan Spice Mills." - the date is missing here

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator time to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 23 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:33, 24 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 13:54, 24 August 2020 (UTC)Reply