Talk:Australia at the 1936 Winter Olympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:52, 11 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

Shall review this article MWright96 (talk) 15:52, 11 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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  • "Australia delegation consisted of one competitor." - The Australian
  • "his was the nation's first appearance at an Winter Olympic Games since the Winter Olympics began in 1924." - competition
  • "who competed in three events in the Speed skating as he finished in 29th overall in the 500 meters and 33rd overall in the 1500 meters and the 5000 meters." - skating competitions. He finished in 29th place overall
  • All three events mentioned in the above sentence should be linked to the relevant articles

Background

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  • Wikilink Winter Olympics
  • " The 1936 Winter Olympics was held at Garmisch-Partenkirchen in Germany and was held from the 6 to 16 February:" - the text in bold can be either took place or occurred
  • Clarify that the Athens Olympics was held in 1896
  • the second use of the word "the" is not needed per MOS:DATESNO
  • "The Australian Olympic Committee was formed on 1 January 1895 with the nation making their debut at the first Olympics in Athens with Teddy Flack being the first representative of the nation." - repetition of "nation"
  • "Australia delegation consist of a speed skater," - The Australian delegation consisted of a single speed skater,
  • "at the 1936 games." - "games" should begin with a capital letter

Speed skating

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  • "22 year old, Ken Kennedy" - the comma before "Ken" is not needed
  • "competed in four speed skating events throughout the 1936 games." - the word "games" is better off beginning with a capital letter
  • "he finished in 33rd with a time of two minutes and 31 seconds," - 33rd place in a time of 2 minutes and 31.8 seconds
  • "he competed in his last event of the games" - same issue as the second point raised in this sub-section
  • "On 13 February, he competed in his last event of the games" - state which event this was for clarity and wikilink that event to the relevant article
  • "he didn't start in the 10000 metres" - no contractions please per MOS:CONTRACTION
  • Wikilink 10000 metres to the relevant article
  • Wikilink Ivar Ballangrud
  • Wikilink Norway to Norway at the 1936 Winter Olympics
  • The tables could be better off having references added to them for extra verification

References

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  • The four references in the bullet points can be placed into a further reading section or deleted

Will place the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 18:28, 11 February 2021 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96: I have looked through the points that have been given and the only query that I have is with the first one as most of the other Good articles in this type of section has the nation instead of what you are proposing here. HawkAussie (talk) 05:44, 12 February 2021 (UTC)Reply