Talk:BAE Systems Nimrod MRA4/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 01:43, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

• The lead seems quite short relative to the size of the article.
• The body needs a copy edit.
  • Too many short sentences, making the prose choppy
  • Too many short paragraphs, with the same effect, making it look untidy
  • Lack of variety in sentence structure—far too many sentences starting with "in [month]" or "on [date]"

For the prose alone, this is not GA standard and I don't think there is much more I can do as a reviewer until the article has been tidied up. You might find other editors willing to help at WP:PRV#General copyediting and/or WP:GOCE. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 02:55, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

It's starting to look much better now. Some of the paragraphs could still do with being merged together and it might benefit from another section header, but the latter is just a suggestion. Keep up the good work and don't hesitate to ping me if or when you need my attention. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 19:38, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

Upon further review of the work that has gone into this, I'm going to pass it. Congratulations. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 05:21, 4 March 2011 (UTC)