Talk:Bachelor's Day (tradition)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 21:16, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Happy to review the article.

Review

Lead section

• Link propose (Marriage proposal, here and in the History section); Saint Patrick.
• Ladies' Privilege should be in bold as it is an alternative name.
• Ladies' Privilege is not mentioned in the main article, and needs to be.
• The lead as it currently stands is too short—see MOS:LEAD for information on its purpose and what it should be like.
• Leap Day has no capitals as far as I am aware.
• Saint Bridget needs to be linked.

1 History

• Link curriculum.
• "Skellig List" should be in italics and without quotation marks.

2 Irish tradition

• Link Easter Day.
• I would amend The custom to ‘The Batchelor’s Day tradition’.
• Puss Sunday is not in bold.

3 Internationally

• Unlink Finland; United Kingdom; United States (MOS:OL).
• The title of this section imo could do with being replaced by something like ‘Similar traditions’.
• In some parts of Europe is too vague.
• I’m wondering why the Finnish tradition is not explained in the same way as the traditions in other countries are explained.
• As the section goes on to discuss particular traditions from three of the countries mentioned here, I don’t think most of the first paragraph is needed.

3.1 Scotland

• Link monks.
• Amend This was supposedly decreed by the young, unmarried Queen Margaret, though she was 5 years old to something like ‘This was supposedly decreed on behalf of Queen Margaret, then 5 years old’, to improve the prose

3.3 United States

• Who was Ralph Waldo Emerson?
• Amend the caption to something like ‘American postcard (1908)’.
• postcard in the caption should be linked.
• The sentence starting Cartoons were published is imo too long and rather ‘bitty’. Consider amending to so something like 'Cartoons mocked women by depicting them attempting to capture unwitting men using nets or guns’.
• Link Cartoons; gender stereotypes (Gender_role#Gender_stereotypes); councils; misogynistically (Misogyny).
• were more equal – ‘had become more equal’?
• and the tradition may have led to the day being used as Sadie Hawkins Day - looks like it should be in a separate sentence.
• How do you know the postcard shown is American?

4 References

• Consider linking Vox (Vox Media).
• Refs 1 & 4 should not have words in capitals.
• The dates (e.g. in Ref 1) need to be formatted correctly (see MOS:DATESNO).
• I’m not convinced that Ref 1 (Ireland Before You Die), Ref 2 (timeanddate.com, also note the citation is incomplete) and Ref 4 (IrishCentral.com) are reliable sources of information, as per WP:SOURCE. What makes you think they are?
• Ref 3 needs a retrieval date.
• Ref 7 is incorrectly and not completely cited (see Template:Cite book for help here).
• Ref 8 needs a {{subscription required}} template.
• Refs 7 & 10 are dead links.

On hold

I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 12 July to allow time for the issues raised to be sorted out. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 10:32, 4 July 2021 (UTC)

No response from the nominator, so the article has failed. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:50, 12 July 2021 (UTC)