Talk:Bailey Dale/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by GhostRiver in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)
I'll be taking at this! — GhostRiver 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lede
edit- Birth date requires a citation, either in the lede or with a sentence about it in the "Early life" head
- Done - Is putting the reference in the infobox ok? Doggo375 (talk) 01:09, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
- Height and weight should also be referenced
- Done - put height and weight citations in infobox as well. Doggo375 (talk) 01:09, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
- In the infobox, space between "2014 National Draft" and "Western Bulldogs"
- Include link to Half-back line for "running half-back"
- "Dale was selected by the Western Bulldogs" → "Thte Western Bulldogs took Dale"
- "2 Brownlow Medal votes" → "two Brownlow Medal votes" per MOS:NUMERAL
Early life & career
edit- Ampersand to "and" in the header
- Link "Collingwood" to Collingwood Football Club
- Spell out and link "Australian Football League" in the first instance in the body
- Thte sentence beginning "He played in the Victorian Under 12 schoolboys" is very long and can probably be split into two, one about the junior team and one about the senior
- "kicking 3 goals" → "kicking three goals" per MOS:NUMERAL
- "kicked 2 more goals" → "kicked two more goals" per MOS:NUMERAL
- Specify in prose that he was taken in the 2014 AFL draft, with the associated link
AFL career
edit2015-2017: Early years
edit- Spell out and link VFL
- Delink "Collingwood" here, as it should be linked above
- 'fairytale' → "fairytale" per MOS:DOUBLE
- Use the conversion template for "eight kilograms"
- "he had a good start" → "He had a good start"
- Remove the fixed image size from the photo in this section, per MOS:IMGSIZE
- "kicking 7 goals" → "kicking seven goals"
- "kicking 2 goals" → "kicking two goals"
- "kicking 4 goals" → "kicking four goals"
in an inspired performance
POV
- Italicize The Age as the name of a publication
2018-2020: form struggles
edit- Include some context for who Chris Judd is in the quotebox
- "form struggles" → "Form struggles"
- "Dale, playing just" → "Dale, who played just"
- "1 goal game" → "one-goal game"
- No comma after "to open the season"
- "kicking 2 goals" → "kicking two goals"
- "Navicular bone" → "navicular bone"
- Some concrete dates, not just rounds, around the foot injury would be helpful
- Done - Specified that the injury was suffered in late May. Doggo375 (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
- No comma after "breakout 2019 season"
- Link "2019 season" to 2019 AFL season
- "4 disposal game" → "four-disposal game"
- "5 goal performance with 4 goals" → "five-goal performance with four goals"
- Continue all the way down replacing sub-10 numerals with the written word
- "three year contract extension" → "three-year contract extension"
- "only playing 9 games" → "who played only nine games"
- "2 goals from 2 games" → "two goals from two games"
2021-: Switch to defence
edit- Make this "2021-present" in the subhead
- "for Dale, going" → "for Dale, who went"
- No comma after "early in the pre-season"
- "19.1%" → "19.1 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- Delink St Kilda, already linked above
- "disposals (a career record)" → "disposals, the latter a career record"
- "By this point in the season, Dale's inclusion in the 2021 All-Australian team was being brought up as a possibility, such was his form across the half-back line." → "His form across the half-back line impressed enough that some began suggesting Dale's inclusion in the 2021 All-Australian team"
Statistics
edit- Citation needed for the pandemic-shortened season note
References
edit- Inconsistent capitalization of "media" in "Western Bulldogs Media" and "AFL Media" throughout
- Done - Changed all instances of 'Western Bulldogs Media' to 'westernbulldogs.com.au' and capitalised all of 'AFL Media'.
- [63] (Beveridge) and [67] (Waterworth) are missing a work
General comments
edit- Images are properly licensed and relevant
- No stability concerns in the revision history
- Copyvio score looks good
Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. — GhostRiver 22:39, 13 November 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks very much for taking on this review! I will get to finishing this review over the next day or two. Doggo375 (talk) 00:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
- @GhostRiver: I've finished up rectifying all the issues pointed out! Let me know if there is anything else to be done! Thanks again for reviewing this article, your review was quick, clear and concise. Doggo375 (talk) 23:55, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
- I moved the ref in the infobox to the lede, and otherwise I think this one is good to go! Good job! — GhostRiver 18:59, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
- @GhostRiver: I've finished up rectifying all the issues pointed out! Let me know if there is anything else to be done! Thanks again for reviewing this article, your review was quick, clear and concise. Doggo375 (talk) 23:55, 14 November 2021 (UTC)