Talk:Ballad of a Homeschooled Girl/GA1

Latest comment: 2 months ago by NegativeMP1 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Nominator: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 15:50, 4 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs) 22:10, 13 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

I was going to open this up with a dumb joke or play on the lyrics, but I stumbled over all my words, made it weird, and made it worse. I'll take a look at this sometime in the next week, hopefully. λ NegativeMP1 22:10, 13 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

None of the quickfail criteria applies to this article, so here's the main review:

Prose review

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  • " Rodrigo wrote it with its producer, Dan Nigro." Some readers could possibly confuse the its. I'd change it to "Rodrigo wrote the song with the album's producer, Dan Nigro"
  • The whole "Every guy I like is guac" thing is kinda funny, but I feel like this could fall onto the lines of trivia. You're free to disagree and I'm not asking you to remove it, but I doubt it's relevancy.
  • I completely agree that it is random that Billboard and NME decided to write articles about this. Since those exist, though, I feel like retaining a small mention.
  • "It begins like a Weezer song, according to John Murphy of MusicOMH, and incorporates grungy guitars and quiet-loud dynamics." Unless I'm missing something, I feel like this should be worded as "According to John Murphy of MusicOMH, it begins like a Weezer song, incoporating grungy guitars and quiet-loud dynamics."
  • Since the Everclear and Third Eye Blind comparison is only attributed to one source, I feel like it should also be attributed in the sample caption.

Image review

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  • No problems here, though I do feel like the alt text on both of the images could be more descriptive. Not necessary, though.

Source spotcheck

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Checked 10% of the articles sources in certain places.

  • Ref 1 verifies its associated text.
  • Ref 5 ditto.
  • Ref 12 ditto.
  • 37 ditto.
  • 30 ditto.
  • 50 ditto. On a side note, is there a reason why it says the source is normally inaccessible / paywalled when I can access it just fine?
    • In contrast, 51 does have a paywall, yet is not marked as such.
      • Oddly I can access both without doing anything, so I have marked both as free access.
  • 69 ditto.
  • 31 ditto.

Final comments

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Overall, this is a pretty well put together article and it's cool that one of her more "obscure" songs (if that makes any sense) is getting attention too. I don't have many complaints, but I'll put this on hold to give you time to address the comments I did post. λ NegativeMP1 22:10, 15 September 2024 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the swift review, NegativeMP1. These are truly hard to get nowadays. I think the comments should all be addressed now. Hotline Miami looks good so I am excited to review that very soon if you would like.--NØ 06:54, 16 September 2024 (UTC)Reply
No problem, I'm hoping to start reviewing articles faster from here on out since I kept taking way too long in the past. And the fact that this is my favorite song from Rodrigo helped too (so slight bias). And you can review Hotline Miami if you want, though I'm not asking you to. Anyways, I'm passing this article since my few issues have been addressed, and if you're working on a Guts GT, I wish you luck. Good job.   λ NegativeMP1 07:09, 16 September 2024 (UTC)Reply
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