Talk:Banjo-Kazooie: Nuts & Bolts/GA1

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Reviewer: AdrianGamer (talk · contribs) 06:28, 9 May 2016 (UTC)

• 11 November 2008 in North America, 14 November 2008 in Europe, 20 November in Australia and 11 December 2008 in Japan - Japan release date is not needed. You only need to mention that the game released worldwide in November 2008.

• Done by Sjones. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• and also the first game in the series released for a console unaffiliated with Nintendo. - you shouldn't assume that readers know that the game originated from a Nintendo console, which is unnecessary.

• Removed. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• More plot in the lead would be nice.

• Expanded. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• The game revolves around vehicle construction - Sounds like the main focus of the game is to build a vehicle, but then you say Gameplay is centred on completing a series of challenges depending on the specific vehicle, which seems to be a little bit contradicting.

• Both really, but rephrased. I put in "gameplay itself" as the reader should know that the game revolves around building vehicles, but gameplay itself is based on driving them. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• There may be too many sales in formation in the lead

• Cut a bit. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• The ultimate objective of the game is to earn "Jiggies" in order to unlock new worlds - Collecting "Jiggles" don't seem to be the ultimate objective. It is a key part of the gameplay. Your "ultimate objective" is probably defeating the boss in the final level.

• Good catch, fixed. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• The doors are initially closed and marked by the number of Jiggies required to open them - Too detailed. Readers probably know what "unlock" means.

• Removed this sentence. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Source for 1600 parts.[1]

• It's also sourced in Kotaku, but I added this, thanks. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• The lead and the gameplay section mentions "a set of challenges", but what are they actually? Vehicular combat? Racing?

• Elaborated. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• What are you fighting actually? Does the game has any combat elements?

• Elaborated, even though it's not much in-game. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• The GameSpot reviews mentions that exploration is now optional. You could mention that in the first paragraph of the gameplay section.

• Done. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• which are scattered throughout the hub world - They are found in crates [2]

• Thanks, added. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• What about the game's multiplayer? Seems like there is both cooperative and competitive multiplayer.

• Added. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• I am not convinced by both screenshots. Wouldn't a gameplay screenshot of the game's key element, vehicle construction/the set of challenges involving vehicles more appropriate to illustrate the game's gameplay?

• Annoyingly there is a lack of decent screenshots. Most of them aren't suitable and have watermarks in them. I've uploaded a new one. JAGUAR  13:05, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Some interview: [3][4]
• Development section is a bit too short.

• I've expanded it with the links you gave me. JAGUAR  19:48, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Initially, Rare conceptualised developing a direct sequel to Banjo-Tooie - Not supported by the source provided

• Removed here and in the lead. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• revealed in a retrospective interview - unnecessary.

• Cut. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• the entire team giving it full-time attention - could further added that it was developed by the core team of the first game.

• Added. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• and making the vehicles playable was a "colossal challenge" - You can move this part to the part talking about the difficulty of players constructing vehicles in a three-dimensional space

• Done. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Banjo-Kazooie: Nuts & Bolts was the final game to be worked on by Kirkhope, a Rare employee since 1995 - It is not his final project, only his last project for Rare. "to be" should be removed.

• Cut. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• which also released the soundtracks for Kameo and Perfect Dark Zero - unnecessary, a bit trivial

• Removed. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Tracklist is WP:GAMECRUFT.

• Removed. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• GameRankings shouldn't be used due to a new consensus at WP:VG

• I never understand that. Removed. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• game's racing mechanics and the overall design of vehicles - Did he explain why?

• Rephrased. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• The reviewer of GamesRadar also criticised Rare's "old habit" of "collect-a-thons", asserting that all the elements of the game were "clumsily put together" - You can move the Game Informer review part here. They are talking about the same thing.

• Done. JAGUAR  13:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Some retrospectives that may be useful in the reception section. [5][6] The refideas can also be used as well.

• The first one is already in the article, but I've made use of the second one, thanks. JAGUAR  19:48, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

Chiming in with two more retrospectives that might be useful for further filling in the development section. [7] [8] -- 136.181.195.25 (talk) 12:20, 11 May 2016 (UTC)

• Is there any information about the game's marketing and accolades?

• Afraid not, I couldn't find any. It certainly didn't win any awards, this game is crap! JAGUAR  19:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• There is a DLC for the game, titled LOG's Lost Challenges. The article should mention about it.[9]

[10]

• I might have deleted that when I wiped the article last week. Oh, I've just come back to this and it looks like an IP has done all the work for me! JAGUAR  19:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Some links are redirected

• Archived the dead ones. JAGUAR  19:48, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

• Source 36 and 37 need a better title.

• Fixed. JAGUAR  19:23, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

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Overall it is a well-written article, though some information is missing. I am not really convinced that you need to source the gameplay section using the manual, given that this is a relatively recent game. When all the issues mentioned above are fixed, the article should be good to go! AdrianGamer (talk) 06:49, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, AdrianGamer. I think I've got everything addressed. JAGUAR  19:49, 10 May 2016 (UTC)

As all the issues were fixed, the article is good to go! Banjo-Kazooie: Nuts & Bolts is now a . Congratulations! AdrianGamer (talk) 12:38, 11 May 2016 (UTC)