Talk:Battle of Andrassos/GA1

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Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) 16:26, 24 January 2017 (UTC)

• dabs ok. links, almost One, Hebraeus, shows as forbidden....
• could you read it through again and polish up some of the writing?
• Coming after a series of costly defeats in the previous years, this battle broke the power of the Hamdanid emirate for good.

following a series of defeats in the previous year, this battle finally broke the power of the Hamdanid emirate.

• ...elated at the success of his raid and full of self-confidence, was riding on his horse, a mare "of extraordinary size an speed", speeding alongside his troops

the elated Sayd... sped alongside his troops on his mare "of extraordinary size and speed"....

• I'll be happy to help if you need it.
• Images: ok, could be helpful to have a map for us ignoramuses.
• Sources: look good, everything cited properly.
• Ping me when you've taken a look. auntieruth (talk) 20:14, 26 January 2017 (UTC)

Hi Auntieruth, thanks for taking the time with this. I've tried to polish up on the prose somewhat (and included a map!), but a fresh pair of eyes might be better. If you want to suggest any particular problematic spots, or do a copyedit yourself, I'd be grateful. Thanks, Constantine ✍ 17:21, 4 February 2017 (UTC)

• Please re read and see if I've changed the meaning of anything. auntieruth (talk) 16:41, 6 February 2017 (UTC)

Looks good, thanks a lot for the improvements! Constantine ✍ 18:46, 6 February 2017 (UTC)