Talk:Battle of Brownsville, Arkansas

GA Review

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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 16:53, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Hi there, I'll review this nomination. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:53, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Unsurprisingly, given the nominator, I didn't find a lot to comment on or fix here, but what I did find is listed below. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:27, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

@PCN02WPS: - how does this look now? Hog Farm _Talk 13:46, 14 July 2022 (UTC)

There wasn't a ton that had to be fixed but it's all good now - happy to give this a pass. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 15:29, 14 July 2022 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• "Skirmish of Brownsville" (as opposed to "Battle") is used in the infobox and one of the sources' titles but not anywhere else in the article
  • Swapped out for "battle" in the infobox. Either one would probably work
• "Part of the Trans-Mississippi Theater of the American Civil War" → at its article, "Trans-Mississippi Theater" uses the lowercase for "trans" - however, I am not sure how important this is
  • I personally think based on an informal scan of sources that the capitol "t" may be the better usage
• I have not seen "circa" used with anything other than approximating dates, and MOS:CIRCA mentions only dates as well; is there precedent for using "circa" (or {{circa}}) for approximating quantities, like numbers of soldiers?
  • I've used it before in a few FAs - Capture of Sedalia, Second Battle of Independence, Battle of Glasgow, Missouri. If it's an issue, I can remove the template
• The lead itself is very good - it gets a little repetitive at times as "Arkansas" is mentioned numerous times and "commanded by" is repeated too, though for each of these there's not a ton that can be done about that. If you can cut down a little on the repetition that would be great but it's not a dealbreaker for me by any means.
  • Have cut down on the uses of "commanded by"

Background

• "Commanding the Confederate troops in the region was Major General Sterling Price, who was in command as Theophilus Holmes was ill." → just a touch repetitive here, emphasis is mine
  • Rephrased
• "although the two officers did not get along well" → this sentence is not sourced; also is there a specific reason noted for this?
  • It's covered by the ref [7] to Christ 2010; will try to come up with
    • Have added a brief bit to explain this (it goes back to Helena)

Battle

• "The initial Confederate plan of battle" → could this be simplified to "The initial Confederate battle plan"?
  • Done
• "A sabre charge by a small force " → couldn't hurt to link sabre here
  • Done

Aftermath

• "The tensions between Marmaduke and Walker boiled over on September 6, with Marmaduke fatally shooting Walker in a duel on September 6." → could this portion of the paragraph be restructured slightly so that this is mentioned before the Skirmish at Ashley's Mills, which happened the day after, just to keep it in chronological order?
  • Done