Talk:Battle of Fort Davidson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 01:13, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:13, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

Sturmvogel - Expect some changes to the Fort Davidson description. I've been revising the version at Fort Davidson per the GA review, so once I get that version finalized, I'll copy it over or such (with attribution if needed, of course). Hog Farm _Bacon 03:01, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

Would you like for me to hold off for a few days for you to take care of that? After diving so deep into the Rodney article, I have an itch to work on some short-lived British destroyers, so no rush on my end.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

No rush on mine, either. I'm taking finals this week, so I'd be a little slow on the response anyway. Hog Farm _Bacon 03:52, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

Sturmvogel 66 - I've gotten the Fort Davidson stuff worked out, and the content here updated, so I'm ready for the review when you are. Hog Farm _Bacon 23:58, 21 November 2020 (UTC)

OK.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:21, 22 November 2020 (UTC)

• No DABs
• Images appropriately licensed
• Link brigadier general and major on first use
  • Done, I think
    • Major in the lede.
      • Oh, I thought you were referring to Major General for some reason. Fixed
• While intended to occur together, the attacks happened in a disjointed fashion, and were repulsed. Awkward
  • Done
    • Better, but if they occurred separately, wouldn't they necessarily be repulsed separately?
      • I've tried again
• After the Fort Davidson repulses, the Confederate troops had low morale, Awkward, perhaps something like "Dispirited by the failed assaults on Fort Davidson, ..." or some such
  • Done
    • repulses reads very oddly here.
      • Makes sense to me, but probably to nobody else. I've reworded it.
• Hyphen in large scale
  • Done
• poorly armed or unarmed proximity alert for "armed", maybe "or lacking weapons"
  • Done
• More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 11:44, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
• his and Colonel Thomas C. Fletcher's, commander of the 47th Missouri Infantry, political aspirations awkward
  • Done
• Clarify that Fort Curtis was located further south near Arcadia
  • Clarified
• fort's walls were 100 feet (30 m) needs an adjective here
  • Added
• 10 feet (3.0 m) wide change this to {{convert|10|ft|m|adj=mid|-wide}} to format this properly
  • Done
    • doubled "wide"
      • Fixed.
• the Confederate cannons fire on Fort Davidson fired?
  • Fixed
• Clarify that the Confederates attacked from the south
  • The actually attacked from multiple different directions. Slayback from the north, and the ones coming down Pilot Knob attacked from the east, as well.
• repulse them in piecemeal "one at a time" or "one by one"
  • Went with individually
• in particular the 4th Missouri Cavalry Regiment and the 8th Missouri Cavalry Regiment trailing comma
  • Added
• Alternate cannons with guns or artillery pieces, every so often
  • Rephrased two of the instances.
• The repulses at For Davidson lowered the morale of the Confederate soldiers, and demonstrated that Price's army was of very low quality. awkward
  • Rephrased
    • Maybe it's just that I'm used to seeing "repulsed" and not "repulses", but that word still doesn't work for me here.
      • Is attempt #3 better?
• Combine cites 45 and 46--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:27, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
  • Actually, one of the two was not the correct citation

• Sturmvogel 66 - Thanks for the review. All points so far have been replied to, does anything else need further work? Hog Farm _Bacon 05:47, 23 November 2020 (UTC)
  • A few minor issues remain.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 10:14, 24 November 2020 (UTC)