Talk:Battle of Hochkirch/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 01:59, 2 February 2017 (UTC)Reply


Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 01:59, 2 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • Lead and infobox;
    • Austrian army of 80,000 "men" ?
    • Prussian army of 30,000–36,000 "men" ?
    • "Field" Marshal Leopold Josef Graf Daun fixed
    • What is the rank of Frederick the Great? King
    • Mention clearly in the lead that Austria has won the war They didn't win the war.
    • 7,300 men, 3 flags lost; lost is redundant
  • Section 1;
    • Mention Leopold Josef Graf Daun along with his rank fixed
    • 80,000-man army -> army of 80,000 men why?
    • Mention Frederick's full name along with rank for first mention in prose (not considering the lead) fixed
    • Better abbreviate the units from second mention of the same units, for example, Kilometers, take care of this throughout the article fixed
    • In frustration; is a bit awkward fixed
    • Who is Wolf Frederick von Retzow? Mention his position and rank fixed
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 17:48, 11 February 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Section 2;
    • Hochkirch stands on a hilltop -> Hochkirch is a located on a hilltop fixed
    • can be seen for miles? What does it mean? fixed
    • twenty-eight, - not required fixed
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 18:25, 11 February 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Section 3;
    • The east side was the first to be attacked; east side of what? fixed
    • 0500 -> 5:00 am per MOS:TIME
    • Marshal James Keith -> Keith, per MOS:LASTNAME fixed
    • 0600 -> 6:00 am fixed 6:00
    • 0700 -> 7:00 amfixed
    • rank of Francis of Brunswick-Wolfenbüttel? Prince fixed
    • 0730 -> 7:30 amfixed
    • 0900 -> 9:00 amfixed
    • 1000 -> 10:00 amfixed
  • Section 4;
    • approximately 8.3 percent, 3.6 percent; both these redundant, remove them
    • In the 4th para, the information on James Keith, about his sister, his grief etc. are out of context for the article. Cut short it.
  • shortened.
  • Section 5; all good
  • Images;
    • "Frederick lost approximately 30% of his army." in the caption of File:Frederick the Great after the Battle of Hochkirch in 1758 by Carl Röchling.jpg is unnecessary fixed
  • 4.8% confidence, violation unlikely
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 07:58, 12 February 2017 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:24, 17 February 2017 (UTC)Reply