Talk:Battle of Lang Vei

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Mztourist in topic Horrible introduction
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A couple of suggestions

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Hi, good work with this so far. I made a couple of minor tweaks for grammar and style and have a couple of minor suggestions for this article:

  • currently there is a mixture of date format. For instance the lead has "6–7 February", but elsewhere "February 6", etc. The format should be consistent, although either way is fine;
  • both "armoured" and "armored" are used (and their variations) - it should probably just be "armored" given it is mainly using US spelling;
  • Note # 14 should probably have details like title, publisher, accessdate etc. added to it;
  • Notes # 29 and 30 "Cash (1985), p. 131" appear to be the same and could be consolidated per WP:NAMEDREFS as this has been done with the others;
  • ISBNs and OCLC numbers could be added to the References. They can be found at http://www.worldcat.org/. This helps readers locate the books in their local library systems.

Anyway, keep up the good work. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 01:37, 3 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

I've added the ISBNs and OCLC numbers to the references. TeriEmbrey (talk) 16:47, 25 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk) 19:39, 4 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: Two found and fixed.[1] Jezhotwells (talk) 19:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Linkrot: I am getting "Server Application Unavailable " on the links to http://tinhdoanquangtri.gov.vn This may be a temporary problem. Jezhotwells (talk) 19:57, 4 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Checking against GA criteria

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    ''To accomplish those tasks, Willoughby had at his disposal one Montagnard, four South Vietnamese rifle companies, and three combat reconnaissance platoons. One Montagnard waht? Company, platoon?  Done
    Hre tribesmen, ?? What are these? Montagnard? Needs explanation, I feel.  Done
    Otherwise prose fine, accords with MoS
  • I have clarified the first part by adding 'company', and added a link to the article on the Hre people of Vietnam because they were different to the Montagnards.Canpark (talk) 13:59, 5 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    References appear OK, assume good faith for off-line.
  2. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    Through and focussed
  3. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  4. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  5. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    Licensed and captioned
  6. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    Just a couple of issues, noted above, on hold for seven days. Jezhotwells (talk) 03:06, 5 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    OK, thanks for the fixes, passing as GA
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Horrible introduction

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The introduction is horribly written. Its basically an entire history of the battle from one narrow perspective frontloaded into the article. An all too common trend these days. 2600:1700:CA01:F20:AD0D:A506:2931:45AD (talk) 06:23, 22 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Provide specific comments rather than just a general criticism. Mztourist (talk) 08:30, 22 September 2022 (UTC)Reply