Talk:Battle of Powick Bridge/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Harrias in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 00:44, 6 August 2020 (UTC)Reply


Lead
  • I'd actually consider it better to indicate that Byron was a Royalist directly when he's first mentioned in the lead, rather than implying it later in the sentence.
Sir John Byron's convoy
  • "Byron became aware of the proximity of the Parliamentarian army, and chose to seek refuge in Worcester on 16 September" - Is there a more specific reason why he chose that city? Did it provide advantages in some way?
Prelude
  • "Brown led a detachment of around 1,000 mounted troops, and they reached the area just south of Worcester on 22 September, and secured a bridge across the north–south flowing Severn." - This leads a bit run-on, with the two and clauses in there
    • Tweaked this to "Brown led a detachment of around 1,000 mounted troops which reached the area just south of Worcester on 22 September, and secured a bridge across the north–south flowing Severn." Is that sufficient, or do you think it needs to be properly split? Harrias talk 07:20, 8 August 2020 (UTC)Reply
Opposing forces
Aftermath
References
  • I'm not super familiar with all of these publishers, but the sources all appear to be reasonably reliable for what they're cited for.

Nice little article. That's it, I think. Hog Farm Bacon 22:55, 7 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Cheers Hog Farm, how's that? Harrias talk 07:20, 8 August 2020 (UTC)Reply