Talk:Behold a Pale Horse (film)/GA1

GA Review

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This article has failed its GA nomination. Issues include:

• The lead is insufficient, as evidenced by the cleanup banner at the top. See WP:LEAD and remember that the lead must be an overview of the entire article.
• The prose does not yet meet the "well-written" standard. Examples:
  • "Behold a Pale Horse is a 1964 film directed by Fred Zinnemann, based on the novel Killing a Mouse on Sunday by Emeric Pressburger, which itself is loosely based on the life of the Spanish anarchist guerrilla, Francisco Sabaté Llopart‎." A rather long sentence, and it has unnecessary commas.
  • "The film is the story of a Catalan guerrilla exiled in France after the Spanish Civil War returning to Catalonia to visit his mother." Very choppy and initally confusing; it almost sounded like the "Spanish Civil War" returned to Catalonia.
  • "Opening on shots from the Spanish Civil War, and a line of Spanish refugees crossing the border into France after defeat by the Francoists, Manuel Artiguez turns away from the border and back towards Spain." Should be, "The movie opens..."
  • "However, once inside the hospital, he kills a few officers, but is finally shot himself. "
• Inline citations should be consistently formatted. Web citations should have publishers and last access dates in addition to URLs and title.s
• "One of the film's stars, Omar Sharif, went so far as to refer to it as a "bad film" by a "good director".[12]" The tone of "went so far" is not very encyclopedic.
• The stubby paragraphs should be merged, and the "Home video release history" should probably be integrated into the previous section.
• File:Behold pale horse score.jpg – the fair use rationale is weak and does not explain why the image adds to the article.
• The "Score" section is stubby and needs more references.
• Are you sure that you have exhausted all available sources? A simple Google Book reveals this. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:49, 7 January 2009 (UTC)