Talk:Belize at the 2012 Summer Olympics/GA1

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Reviewer: Kees08 (talk · contribs) 19:07, 24 February 2017 (UTC)Reply


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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.

Should be 'were held': Belize competed at the 2012 Summer Olympics in London, which was held

Sentence is longer than it needs to be, the s needs to be in the wikilink as well for wildcards: The delegation included two track and field athletes and one judoka: Kenneth Medwood, Kaina Martinez and Eddermys Sanchez, the former qualified by recording a time that met qualification standards while the latter two entered via wildcards.

Also recommend using athletics instead of track and field if that country would refer to it as athletics.

Reword this: The highest number of athletes sent by Belize to a Summer Games is eleven to the 1984 Olympics in Los Angeles.

This is sort of awkwardly stuck at the end of the paragraph, is there a better spot for it? - Belize participated in the London Summer Olympics from 27 July to 12 August 2012.

Remove selected: National Olympic Committee (NOC) selected selected two athletes

This is a little awkwardly worded: Medwood's performance ensured qualification into the contest's semi-final stage as the fastest losing runner.

Try using finished instead of ranked: Medwood ranked ahead of Ukraine's

Use of curly quotation marks, and capitalization of Games: never been to the games.”

Curly apostrophe: It’s something

I don't think we need quotation marks for a single word, also try using 'was' left if you can: was feeling "good" and was

Quarterfinal and semifinal have hyphens in them in the prose, but not in the tables. Be consistent.

Try represent instead of participate: He was the oldest person to participate Belize

Use 'and made': and was making his first

Typo: defeated by his opponment

A lot of over-use of the word was, such as here: and therefore was eliminated from the competition.

  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.

Are the page numbers right for the second citation? I looked and didn't see the information it was supporting.

I think you should use the roman numerals for the page numbers, because the book has actual page numbers as well.

This inline citation should go to his athlete page on Sports Reference: He had not participated in any previous Olympic Games.

Same with the other athletes.

  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  2c. it contains no original research.
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment.
@Kees08: Done all of the above points mentioned. MWright96 (talk) 07:33, 13 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
@MWright96: I think I looked through all your work. Still could use a tiny bit of additional citation work, and that one sentence reworded. Almost there! Kees08 (talk) 02:45, 14 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Kees08: Implemented your other suggestions. That should be the remainder of the issues sorted. MWright96 (talk) 18:09, 15 March 2017 (UTC)Reply