Talk:Ben Tudhope/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 23:18, 13 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

I'll take up this review as part of the chain of Paralympians submitted in past few days. I mainly focus on copy editing issues. Given the size of these articles the GAR itself should not take too long so I will leave down some initial comments on these articles within 48 hours. I'm sorry if I'm reviewing too many of your articles, Hawkeye! Jaguar 23:18, 13 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:  
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:  
    It is well referenced.
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  
    C. No original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  

Wow. Ben Tudope is younger than me!

  Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:09, 26 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

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Lead

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  • " He was the youngest competitor at the Games from any country." - assuming he is the youngest competitor in the Paralympic games and not the whole Olympic games? I've addressed this point myself so it says "He was the youngest competitor at the Winter Paralympic Games from any country." but you can revert this or change it if you don't think it's right?
  • Other than this, the lead complies per WP:LEAD.

Career

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  • "His Winter Paralympics path began in 2011 when Peter Baff, the head coach of Perisher's Winter Sports Club alerted Peter Higgins, Australia's Paralympic snowboard team head coach, of his ability even though he was not tall." - was he not tall enough? Is there a height limit in skiing or would his height bring a concern to affect his ability to ski?
    • No, there is no height limit. Normally you will chose a snowboard based on your height. But this creates problems for tackling the course which is for a regular sized board. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:09, 26 April 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "In 2014, he is 150 centimetres (59 in) tall," - this should be converted into feet/metres
  • "He was the youngest competitor at the Games from any country" as said in the lead section, would "He was the youngest competitor at the Winter Paralympic Games from any country" sound better?

On hold

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If all of those issues can be addressed to, this article should have no problem with passing the GAN. This article is small and compact, so most of the prose is good and there are very little points to make as there are no problems in the references either. I'll put this on hold for the standard week. You're nearly done on promoting every Australian Paralympian to GA! Jaguar 20:55, 25 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

Close - promoted

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I'll keep these brief. All issues addressed. The article now meets the GA criteria. Well done! Jaguar 21:27, 26 April 2014 (UTC)Reply