Talk:Benedict Cumberbatch/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:12, 25 April 2014 (UTC)

Cumberbatch is a legend - it will be good to review this! I'll leave down some initial comments within 48 hours and will focus on copy editing issues in the article. Thanks, ☠ Jaguar ☠ 21:12, 25 April 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   It is well referenced.

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Sorry for coming to the review so late. I've been so busy at college... ☠ Jaguar ☠ 15:07, 1 May 2014 (UTC)

Initial comments

Lead

• Although the prose is generally good, some of the lead could be re-organised:
• "He has portrayed Sherlock Holmes in the television series Sherlock since 2010 and has led the ensemble cast of Sir Tom Stoppard's adaptation of Parade's End in 2012." - how about His most notable television appearances include his portrayal of Sherlock Holmes in the television series Sherlock since 2010 and has led the ensemble cast of Sir Tom Stoppard's adaptation of Parade's End in 2012 (you can improvise with this if you want! Or if you want to leave it the same?)
• There are citations in the lead but this is acceptable as they are placed after quotes.
• The first opening sentence ("Benedict Timothy Carlton Cumberbatch (19 July 1976) is an English film, television and theatre actor, voice artist and producer.") seems to short - maybe a paragraph could be merged into this?
• Other than that the lead complies per WP:LEAD but its organisation could be improved.

I have made changes based on your suggestions. Hope it helps.Chocolate Charlie (talk) 06:08, 2 May 2014 (UTC)

Television

• "Cumberbatch's television roles include two separate guest roles in Heartbeat (2000, 2004), Freddy in Tipping the Velvet (2002)..." - were these his first appearances in television?
• "His first starring role on television was as the title character in Hawking in 2004." - this should mention that this was his first starring role (as mentioned in the lead).
• "The two-hander depicted a little-known October 1938 meeting between Soviet spy Guy Burgess" - what does 'two hander' mean?

Personal life

• "In the end, their abductors drove them into unsettled country and set them free without explanation." - please correct this if I'm wrong, but I don't understand how pats of a country can be unsettled?

References

All references are in check - citations are in the correct places and every reference complies per the GA cirteria.

On hold

This is a well written article. The prose is generally good in the article and all references meet the GA criteria. The only problems I found with this were the organisation of the lead and a few minor copy editing issues I found in some sections I mentioned above. I'll put this article on hold for the standard seven days. Sorry for reviewing this so late, I had no idea I would be that busy! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 15:38, 1 May 2014 (UTC)

I've made edits regarding your suggestions. Hope it helps.Chocolate Charlie (talk) 06:14, 2 May 2014 (UTC)

Close - promoted

My time and internet access is very limited (this hospital doesn't have connection) so I'm going to have to keep this brief. I don't see any problems with the article now, it seems all of my concerns have been attended to. It now meets the GA criteria. Thank you and well done on doing it so quickly. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 17:50, 4 May 2014 (UTC)