Talk:Bengie Molina/GA1
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:58, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.
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Infobox and lede
edit- Add "MLB" in parentheses after "Major League Baseball"
- "got his first" → "received his first"
Early life
edit- Delink "Ladislao Martínez" per MOS:PARTIALNAMELINK
- Should "baseball hall of fame" in "Puerto Rico baseball hall of fame" be capitalized?
- Per WP:INTEGRITY, I'd prefer if the citations at the end of the first paragraph were spread out and linked to specific sentences
- I would, but some of the sentences are backed up by multiple refs, and it would be a little difficult to sort all these out. Plus, the citations are done this way in Yadier Molina, another good article (from which I heavily copied the first couple of paragraphs). Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:40, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
- Hmm, okay. Just know if you take this to DYK or FAC that they'll be a lot pickier. — GhostRiver 00:13, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- I would, but some of the sentences are backed up by multiple refs, and it would be a little difficult to sort all these out. Plus, the citations are done this way in Yadier Molina, another good article (from which I heavily copied the first couple of paragraphs). Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:40, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
College
edit- Instead of using separate conversion factors, you can do
{{convert|85|to|87|mph}}
Professional career
editAnaheim Angels
edit- "Mayaguez" → "Indios de Mayagüez"
- I don't love the phrasing of
taught him so much about catching
, but I don't have any better ideas of how to rephrase it - "was calling him" → "called him"
- "Despite getting" → "Despite receiving"
- "37%" → "37 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- The exact wording of MOS:PERCENT is "are commonly used", which implies to me that this isn't a requirement. I'd be happy to change it anyway if it was only used once or twice, but given that the % symbol appears several times in the article and the use is consistent, I think it's fine to keep it that way. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:44, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
- "45%" → "45 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- Add the diacritics for Iván Rodríguez
- "becoming the only MLB catcher ever"
- "44%" → "44 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- Add spaces around ellipses in "battles his weight" per MOS:ELLIPSES
- "26%" → "26 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- Add diacritics for Bartolo Colón
- We have a WL for personal catcher? Game changer!
- Perfect for cricket fan reviewers that have no idea what this means! (Although, whenever I'm annoyed at someone's total ignorance of the sport, I remind myself that at least they're reminding me what isn't as commonly known as I think it is.) Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:47, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
- Add diacritics for "Víctor Martínez"
- "31%" → "31 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
Free agency
edit- Hyphen to en dash in the section header
- No comma needed after "$18 million"
- Link "prospects" to Prospect (sports)
Toronto Blue Jays
edit- "13%" → "13 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- "18%" → "18 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
San Francisco Giants
edit- Link concussion
- "becoming the first Giant with two home runs"
- "off of Jorge Julio"
- "2.9%" → "2.9 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
by a San Francisco Giant
does this distinction mean that someone had more RBI when the team was in NY?- Not sure, but the source said "San Francisco Giant," without clarifying who the NY record-holder was. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 19:50, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
- "30%" → "30 percent"
- "1000th hit" → "1,000th hit"
- Link sacrifice fly in the first paragraph and delink in the second of the 2008 section
- "35%" → "35 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- "23%" → "23 percent" and "2.5%" → "2.5 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- ""one of the greatest defensive catchers in Giants history."" → ""one of the greatest defensive catchers in Giants history"." per MOS:LQ
- No comma needed after "Molina re-signed"
Texas Rangers
edit- "23%" → "23 percent"
- DYK is admittedly not my favorite part of Wikipedia, but the part about the guaranteed World Series ring would make a great hook
Legacy
edit- Some kind of topic sentence in the first paragraph about his relationship with his pitchers would be nice
Coaching and broadcasting career
edit- Write out and link St. Louis Cardinals in the first sentence
- How did they not get mentioned until after his career? Good thing this wasn't the Yadier article ... 19:53, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
Personal life
editReferences
edit- Good
General comments
edit- Images are properly licensed and relevant
- No stability concerns in the revision history
- Earwig score is artificially inflated by direct quotes and proper nouns, actual prose looks good
Everything looks good on my end, passing now! — GhostRiver 00:13, 18 January 2022 (UTC)