Talk:Bernheim syndrome

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In the general description of Bernheim syndrome, I think you should briefly mention what the syndrome leads to (right-sided heart failure?)

In the Etiology section, I feel as though the quote by Hippolyte Bernheim is not needed or if you want to include Bernheim it can be mentioned in the first sentence since the first sentence summarizes the quote already (I think?). I also do not think the sentence, "In the clinical period, there are clinical signs of Bernheim Syndrome" since it sounds repetitive and is already given as you go into the next sentences. Some of the history was mentioned in the Etiology section, but I think having a dedicated "history" section of how it was discovered would be interesting to have as well!

In the second picture, it highlights how the movement is severely impaired, but what movement is severely impaired (blood or ventricle?)? If it's possible maybe mention the method used to obtain the picture? If it's possible, I think adding a little more detail to the image caption could help people understand the picture/gif more.

In general, this is a really well-outlined and written article! I think for some of the scientific terms, if you could find wikipedia articles to link to those complex terms to help understand what the term is more would help your article become more accessible to a wider audience. For example, in Signs and Symptoms, if you could find wikipedia links to things like edema, hypertension, etc. (Not all the described symptoms or terms will have wikipedia articles though)

For a minor point, some of the spellings for Bernheim is typed as Bernhiem. Omo2019 (talk) 16:32, 18 November 2019 (UTC)