Talk:Bertha McNeill/GA1

Latest comment: 1 year ago by SusunW in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 16:40, 19 February 2023 (UTC)Reply


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  • Just a suggestion, should "early life and education" be re-named to "early life" since her education partly extends into the period of her career?
I used to just call that section early life, but lots of people in various reviews said it should encompass early life and education, meaning before she was working, which kinda makes sense to me. I write a lot of articles about women and it seems to me that it is fairly common for women to work (even if that is in the home) and go to school. It is also pretty common that as part of their career, they continue their education to advance in their jobs. SusunW (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Regarding, "... she earned a master's degree in 1950"; shouldn't the year (1945) mentioned in Plastas 2004 be given preference, being the academic source here?
The reason I put a note was that the academic source was in dispute with information released directly from the school. I opted to use the school's release, but explained it. I guess I could have done it the other way around, though. ;) SusunW (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Arteriosclerosis should be wiki-linked.
  Done SusunW (talk) 18:06, 21 February 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "She is remembered as an influential member of the peace movement and a leader whose activism linked peace to freedom, as well as economic and civic justice." The sources don't mention "civic justice", also the wording could be changed a bit as the present version can make it seem like a novel characteristic of her activism, whereas she is mentioned as one in a group.
Human rights is specifically mentioned in Ross-Sheriff & Swigonski, which is also cited. In McNeill's era it would have been called civil rights or civic justice. SusunW (talk) 18:23, 21 February 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • Lutz 2001 specifically names her as one of the leaders who risked being charged with subversion for their linkage of "peace with economic justice" so could it be included in the last paragraph of "activism"?
I input it in the section that talks about the House Un-American Activities Committee, because it is talking about the 1950s and subversion.   Done SusunW (talk) 18:23, 21 February 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • The "other names" in the infobox doesn't appear necessary, usually not for abbreviated forms.
I usually list every version I find in sources (unless that is totally excessive.) SusunW (talk) 18:23, 21 February 2023 (UTC)Reply

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  1. Comprehension: The article is well written.
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    (a) (references) The article has appropiate in-line citations and a list of references   Pass
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) Sources used are reliable.   Pass
    (c) (original research) No original research found. (updated)   Pass
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    (a) (major aspects) The article largely covers all major aspects, one suggestion made.   Pass
    (b) (focused) The article is on topic.   Pass
  7. Neutrality: The article is neutral.
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