Talk:Bibron's toadlet

Wiki Education assignment: Behavioral Ecology 2022

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 30 August 2022 and 9 December 2022. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Anishal311 (article contribs). Peer reviewers: Lvanzen3, Qinan123, Jsun2148.

Overall, I found that the article was very well written with good information and a clear and concise tone. I did not think there was much else that I could add for substance but I did find that there were some minor grammatical mistakes that I fixed. I also added in another image of the Bibron’s toadlet since I thought that it would be important to highlight the colorations of the toadlet that the article describes. --Qinan123 (talk) 17:27, 18 October 2022 (UTC)

— Assignment last updated by CalJS (talk) 01:51, 14 October 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review

Edits made:

I removed the word ecology from the “Behavior and ecology” subsection to limit redundancy.

Removed some extraneous spaces.

Suggested edits:

There are some areas of the text where citations are needed. For example, the “Behavior and ecology” subsection does not have a citation attached to it

I would also try to add a citation to every sentence; specifically, the last sentences of some of the paragraphs are missing citations. It may just be that those sentences were cited by the footnote before, but it may be good to clarify.

I’m a little confused why there is a source section and a references section. Maybe putting the sources in the references would improve clarity.

Perhaps adding a little more to the lead section. This a very interesting frog and I think putting a little more in the introduction might grab the reader’s attention.

Maybe adding an image or two would make the article more engaging!

Jsun2148 (talk) 19:42, 18 October 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review

A lot of the sentences are a bit clunky and re-use words.

Under Description, I’m a bit confused by the last two sentences. “This is due to the hypothesized longer growing period of female members of the species. The cause of female longevity is unknown but it is speculated that it is due to decreased predation risk and increased lifetime expectancy.” If the longer growing period is hypothesized, how are you certain that it is the cause of the sexual dimorphism in size? I would rephrase to something like “This dimorphism may be due to a longer growing period for females.” You then talk about female longevity which is different than a longer growing period (longevity = whole lifetime, growing period = tadpole and juvenile phase). Also, increased lifetime expectancy is listed as a reason for longevity? Are those not the same? I’m just overall confused by what is being said here.

Also, species names don’t need to be capitalized unless they’re a proper noun (two striped grass frog does not need to be capitalized, I fixed this in the text).

Citations are needed for the first paragraph of the Behaviour section.

I’ve added in Oxford commas to the article since I find they flow better and make the text easier to read, but that can of course be changed since the sentences are already grammatically correct.

Also, no need to use “the” in front of the scientific name of the species. Ex., “The eggs of the P. bibronii”, it’s fine to use “The eggs of P. bibronii”.

The breadth and depth of information is amazing for this article (I’d say definitely satisfying the Good Article requirements information-wise), and the sections about calling behavior and chemosignalling are fascinating and really well written! I really enjoyed reading this!

I think the article just needs a good read-through to fix some of the phrasing and the flow of the sentences. Some of the points made are a bit confusing, so I think reading them aloud would help with understanding how they need to be rephrased.

I think the article could also use some more pictures further down. Lvanzen3 (talk) 23:22, 20 October 2022 (UTC)