Talk:Biological determinism/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 14:23, 5 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 08:07, 15 June 2024 (UTC)

• refers to the supposedly => to the supposed
  • Done.
• led to the desire to solve the problem Doesn't sound right
  • Edited.
• by forcibly reducing breeding by supposedly defective people Better phrasing needed; forcibly and supposedly are the main issues, along with the two "by"
  • Edited.
• U.S. states brought in laws Brought in? Should be enacted
  • Too British for you, probably. Said 'enacted'.
• people from southern and eastern Europe to America Should be US for a more global audience
  • Edited.
• Cite 8 needs page nos.
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• Cite 14 needs page nos.
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• Cite 24 needs page nos.
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• Cite 25 needs page nos.
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This article is small, so not much to nitpick at. An interesting read and should be promoted in no time. When all is done, I'd appreciate a review of one of my articles in the Biology and medicine section. Best, Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 20:41, 15 June 2024 (UTC)

Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:46, 15 June 2024 (UTC)

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