Talk:Birthday Cake (song)/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Hahc21 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 04:33, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
Review
editOriginal interlude
edit- Composition and lyrics
- "1:18 (one minute, 18 seconds)" >> "one minute and 18 seconds" (spell out numbers less than 10 and avoid redundancy)
- Done Aaron • You Da One
- "your younger fans need more SUBSTANCE." >> a [sic] is needed after substance.
- Done Aaron • You Da One
—Hahc21 14:53, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
Remix
edit- First paragraph is too long. Consider splitting.
- The bit about Nicki, Demi, Katy etc. was actually WP:OR, I don't know who added this. But I've removed it.
General comments
edit- With the actual length of the article, the lead should be longer to properly cover all the article body.
- The first lead covers the interlude, and says Brown is on the remix. The second lead covers the remix. Aaron • You Da One 11:30, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
—Hahc21 14:59, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
- More comments
- When you split the article, you added a cover to the remix. What happened? That cover wasn't official?
- Can't have been. Looked it though. Aaron • You Da One
- Maybe, this was the image i saw on the article: [1] —Hahc21 16:36, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
- Made some fixes on 'Chart performance' of the remix:
- "tonumber" >> "to number";
- "Airplay Honor gainer" >> "Airplay Gainer honor again"
- The 'other remixes' section is too short. Why don't you consider merging it with another one?
- Done Aaron • You Da One
- Also, the first paragraph of 'Development' seems to fit better on Background, since it's specs about Aguilera and tweets, mainly.
- Hmm okay. Aaron • You Da One
—Hahc21 15:34, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
- Okay. Everything has bee addressed.
Verdict
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—Hahc21 16:36, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks Aaron • You Da One
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