Talk:Bismarck-class corvette

GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 00:03, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

• Taking this one on. Courcelles (talk) 00:03, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

• Missing a word in "and 6.18 to 6.3 m (20.3 to 20.7 ft)."
  • Good catch
• "one pinnace," Dab link there
  • Fixed
• "Stein had twelve Gneisenau had fourteen" Missing comma
  • Fixed - there was a time I used too many commas. I may have over-corrected ;)
• "the German torpedo-boat force had increased to the size that Blücher could fill both roles" Might be wrong, but sure feels like we're missing a "no longer" in this sentence.
  • Whoops!
• "sinking her and killing most of her crew." Might want to be more specific about which ship sank.
  • I had wondered if that was clear enough when I wrote it
• "A strong storm surprised the crew, who raised, through a communication problem between the commander and engine room crew, raised anchor and tried to get the vessel underway." Two "raised"s
  • Fixed
• As usual, nothing but some minor issues. Courcelles (talk) 00:23, 28 July 2018 (UTC)
  • Thanks again, Courcelles! Parsecboy (talk) 10:13, 28 July 2018 (UTC)
    • Nicely done, promoted. Courcelles (talk) 15:20, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

SMS Stein edit

I altered this sentence under SMS Stein: " all of the other Bismarck-class corvettes had at least one deployment aboard." in two ways- first, to correct spelling of "aboard" to "abroad", clearly what is intended, and second to add the word "full" before "deployment", as a clarification since the passage immediately goes on to describe a voyage to China, which is abroad, but not a full term of service away from Germany. A slightly more specific form of words seemed in order, and could be achieved with one word. Random noter (talk) 02:26, 12 January 2024 (UTC)

Fine by me - of course I knew what I meant (I am in my own head, after all!), but I can see how that could be unclear. Parsecboy (talk) 13:51, 12 January 2024 (UTC)