Talk:Bizenghast/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: –– Jezhotwells (talk) 19:45, 10 April 2010 (UTC)

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   ... she discovers that her name is written on a contract and she is bound to return to the mausoleum every night to free the ghosts. I think that this would read better as "... she discovers that her name is written on a contract which binds her to return to the mausoleum every night to free the ghosts."  Done

   If she fails, she will die and stay with the mausoleum as a corpse. Surely "If she fails, she will die and stay in the mausoleum as a corpse."?  Done

   Later, the mausoleum appears as two stones that speak to Dinah to help her overcome Vincent's death. Does this mean that the mausoleum turns into two stones? How does speaking to her help her overcome Vincent's death?

   Later when Dinah is in another vault, the mausoleum appears as two stones that help her overcome the depression which resulted from Vincent's death. Still doesn't work. Please try to explain here what you mean, at the moment this is nonsense. How does the mausoleum "appear as two stones"? Are you trying to say that the "spirit of the mausoleum" appears? How specifically do they help her overcome the depression? Do they talk to her? Do they have special healing powers? You have to spell it out.  Done

   Dinah continues with the vaults ... Continues searching?  Done

   ''After the mausoleum is locked down, they send Dinah home; there she finds the townspeople acting strangely and that her aunt has disappeared. Who "locks the mausoleum down? Perhaps rephrase this sentence for clarity.  Done

   ''The ghosts return to Bizenghast with Dinah as their leader to eradicate the sickness in the town. Did they return with Dinah when she was sent home"? Or does she go back? It is not very well written and not very clear.  Done

   ... where comics were not a large part of society. Perhaps just "where comics were not readily available." or similar  Done

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   All references check out, all support the statements, all appear to be RS for manga,

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Is the plot section a summary of the whole series, or just a part of it?

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   OK, on hold for seven days whilst the issues noted above are addressed. I have watchlisted this page, so please leave comments here. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 20:47, 10 April 2010 (UTC)

   Just one phrase left. At the moment it makes no sense at all

   Ok, thanks for fixing that last issue. I am happy to list this as a good article. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 12:42, 17 April 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time to review this article. I think I have fixed the issues with the prose. The plot covers the whole series which is still ongoing. Kaguya-chan (talk) 21:51, 10 April 2010 (UTC)

Fixed the sentence. Kaguya-chan (talk) 18:51, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

Sorry for the wait; I had to re-read the book again to figure out exactly what was happening. That the part with the hooded angel speaking to Dinah is a little strange. :) Kaguya-chan (talk) 18:58, 16 April 2010 (UTC)