Talk:Blagdon Lake/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 00:43, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:43, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
- No DABs
- Connection errors on two external links.
- I'm not seeing these.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- I can connect manually to all of these except the Western Daily press which requires a subscription. So add "|subscription=yes" to the cite template.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- It already says "via = British Newspaper Archive|subscription=yes" in the citation template.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Oops, sorry, I didn't look at the citation to see if it was there, I was just using the link checker.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- It already says "via = British Newspaper Archive|subscription=yes" in the citation template.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- I can connect manually to all of these except the Western Daily press which requires a subscription. So add "|subscription=yes" to the cite template.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- I'm not seeing these.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- Loink rotative beam pumping engine, suction tanks, trout rearing, sewer
- rotative beam pumping engine -> Beam engine, not sure what to link "suction tank" to? trout linked, sewers -> Sanitary sewer.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- Me neither, but I think that you could clarify it to say that the suction tanks of the pumping engines and that would be good enough.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:55, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Added.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Move that bit to first mention in the lede.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Done.— Rod talk 13:51, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Move that bit to first mention in the lede.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Added.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Me neither, but I think that you could clarify it to say that the suction tanks of the pumping engines and that would be good enough.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:55, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- rotative beam pumping engine -> Beam engine, not sure what to link "suction tank" to? trout linked, sewers -> Sanitary sewer.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- 8,456,000,000 litres (1.860×109 imp gal; 2.234×109 US gal) Add adj=on to the template to put it in its proper adjectival form.
- Done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- Not there, it's not adjectival the way that you phrased that sentence. I meant in the lede: The 8,456,000,000 litres (1.860×109 imp gal; 2.234×109 US gal) lake still provides The quantity describes the lake and acts like an adjective.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:55, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry - now done.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Not there, it's not adjectival the way that you phrased that sentence. I meant in the lede: The 8,456,000,000 litres (1.860×109 imp gal; 2.234×109 US gal) lake still provides The quantity describes the lake and acts like an adjective.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:55, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- It is a hard water area which is susceptible to eutrophication with transient stratification in the summer. As a result, a research programme has been established to observe and measure the limnology of This is very jargony even though you've linked all the main terms. Can you rewrite this a little more simply while keeping the links for readers who want to investigate further?
- I've tried to explain this.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- Here's my attempt. Note that I'm not sure that an algal bloom is what actually happens, but it is a bit more familiar to the average reader than phytoplankton buildup. And how important is the stratification? "It is a [[hard water area]] with high mineral content that is vulnerable to [[eutrophication]] in the summer, that can cause [[algal bloom]]s, with transient [[Stratification (water)|water layers]]." Feel free to tweak this as you see fit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- I've used your version. I'm not an expert in this but my reading of the source is that the layers (stratification) affects the build up - but could be removed.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- I don't know the science of algal blooms/phytoplankton buildup either, but I don't that I have strong feelings about the phrase either.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- I've used your version. I'm not an expert in this but my reading of the source is that the layers (stratification) affects the build up - but could be removed.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Here's my attempt. Note that I'm not sure that an algal bloom is what actually happens, but it is a bit more familiar to the average reader than phytoplankton buildup. And how important is the stratification? "It is a [[hard water area]] with high mineral content that is vulnerable to [[eutrophication]] in the summer, that can cause [[algal bloom]]s, with transient [[Stratification (water)|water layers]]." Feel free to tweak this as you see fit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- I've tried to explain this.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- works closely with its larger neighbour Chew Valley Lake what does this mean?
- I've attempted to explain.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- and 3.25 ft (0.99 m) stroke add "with a" after "and".
- Done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- 30 inches (76.2 cm) diameter pump bucket, 3.5 ft (1.07 m) strike adjectival form on both of these.
- Done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- of a burts main fix the typo and link main.
- Done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- gothic style meter house put a hyphen after gothic.
- Done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- 212.7 hectares (526 acres), notified in 1971 what does notified mean? Created?
- It is when the Secretary of State signs the document to designate it as a Site of Special Scientific Interest - not sure how to word that.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- I think that created works well enough.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Changed.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- I think that created works well enough.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- It is when the Secretary of State signs the document to designate it as a Site of Special Scientific Interest - not sure how to word that.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- In the ecology section you're using semi-colons instead of the full colons appropriate for the lists that follow.
- Hopefully done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- The section should group the plants and animals together, so move the orchids to the end of the first paragraph and the mammals up with the birds and insects.
- Done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- Be consistent about using title case in your bibliography.
- Did you mean "Blagdon Lake Birds" in the ext links? If so done.— Rod talk 18:28, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- Nope, Wilson, et al.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- OK Hopefully done now.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Images appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:32, 10 October 2015 (UTC)
- Missed these earlier, link weir and spillway.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:16, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Linked.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Make these last few changes and we'll be done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)
- Linked.— Rod talk 13:36, 11 October 2015 (UTC)