Talk:Blood Harmony

Let's fall in love for the night

I think an article should be created for "Let's Fall in Love for the Night". It is his most successful song and reached number 20 on the alternative songs chart. Beatleswillneverdie (talk) 18:23, 12 March 2020 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Blood Harmony/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:30, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Oldest album GAN right now; appropriate for me to review now since I removed this nom originally when you had retired! --K. Peake 08:30, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• "by his own label OYOY, through AWAL," → "by his record label OYOY, distributed by AWAL," with the wikilink
• Release date is not mentioned anywhere in the body; probably write out in the third section
• "record. The EP was a commercial underperformance," → "record that commercial underperformed," to avoid having such a short sentence
• "The EP's lead single," → "The lead single," with the wikilink
• "and Rock Airplay charts." → "and Rock Airplay charts, respectively."
• "support of the release." → "support of the EP."
• "on August 7, 2020 featuring" → "on August 7, 2020, featuring"
• Target single to Single (music)

•  Not done, already wikilinked in the first sentence of the second para. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:19, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• My bad, must have missed that. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• Remove comma before entitled

Background

• "Finneas teased the EP" → "Finneas teased Blood Harmony"
• "The EP marks" → "The EP marked"
• "speaks for itself."" → "speaks for itself"." per MOS:QUOTE
• "He also said" → "Finneas also said,"
• I take issue with the second sentence of the quote, as that is practically all repeating what was said before so remove it but keep the first sentence.

Composition

• Retitle to Composition and lyrics
• Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
• "It features minimalist" → "The song features minimalist production"
• "an aggressive beat and" → "an aggressive beat, and"
• [8][6] should be put in numerical order
• Add comma after "Shelter"
• Add mention of the song's tropical beat

•  Not done --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• Target Latin to Latin music
• Target gospel to Gospel music
• Wikilink bluesy
• "vocal embellishment and" → "vocal embellishment, and"
• "with elements of" → "has elements of"

•  Not done for some reason this has been removed --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

I removed it because of The Heights sources mentioned it had elements of pop. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:55, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• "sees Finneas sing" → "It sees Finneas sing"
• "and gets angry when the past gets" → "while getting angry when the past seemingly blends"
• "and finds comfort by dreaming that they can be together in" → "but finds comfort by dreaming about being together with her in"
• Remove target on ballad
• "and are almost entirely" → "with it being almost entirely"
• Change entitled to titled to be less repetitive with the lead
• "has noted the influence of" → "noted the influence of"
• [28][5] put in numerical order

Promotion

• Retitle to Release and promotion; remove the sub-section for singles and add the album's release as the first sentence
• The source only backs up the song's release in Australia; either add more citations, a different one or reword accordingly
• You forgot to add Canada after "in"
• Wikilink music video
• "directed by Sam Bennett and choreographed" → "directed by Sam Bennett, while choreographed"
• Target single to Single (music)
• Same issue with the second single as the one I mentioned earlier in this section
• "It received a remix" → "The song received a remix"
• Add a comma after "Shelter"
• "on September 30, 2019." → "and released on September 30, 2019."

 Not done, already mentions that it is the four and final single. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:19, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Damn, my bad here again. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Live performances

• "Finneas toured throughout the" → "He toured throughout the"
• "In October of the same year," → "That same month,"
• Remove the word setlist since there is no setlist mentioned, just the tracks on the album
• Add speech mark to end the title "I Don't Miss You at All"

Reception

• Remove the opening sentence, as three reviews is not enough to back a critical overview up
• "writing for NME gave the EP 4 out of 5 stars, saying the songs" → "writing for NME, said the songs" since the rating is in the box
• "and has an" → "and have an"

•  Not done

• "modern production tweaks."" → "modern production tweaks"." per MOS:QUOTE
• "Writing for Billboard, Glenn Rowley" → "For Billboard, Glenn Rowley"
• "of human emotion."" → "of human emotion"."

•  Not done

• "was the "most" → "is the "most"
• "of Finneas' career."" → "of Finneas' career"."
• "She continued saying" → "She continued, saying"
• "and production triumph."" → "and production triumph"."

Track listing

• Good

Charts

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

References

• Copyvio score is somewhat high at 46.5%, but that is mostly due to title so this isn't really offensive
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Cite middlename directly after the first for ref 9
• Wikilink Earmilk on ref 12
• Remove or replace ref 15 per WP:RSSM
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 17
• Regarding ref 29, if you wish to add various citations, see what you have done in the past
• iTunes → Apple Music (DE) on ref 36 and the above comment may apply
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 45

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but make sure you go through properly to avoid missing things like you did the last few times! --K. Peake 12:03, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Thanks for the review. All of your concerns should be completed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:29, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss You missed a few, which I went over above. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Jesus Christ. I'm so stupid. I have fixed them now... The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:56, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now, and advice for next time would be to go through the comments more than once to check everything is done. --K. Peake 07:23, 27 January 2021 (UTC)